The Legend Of The Shadow

Re: The Legend Of The Shadow

Postby KiarasMate » March 11th, 2010, 2:19 am

...and the plot thickens. ^^ Nice new part to your story KK. :) So far, my prediction is holding true but we'll see what happens next. ^^ Keep up the awesome work buddy. :)
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Re: The Legend Of The Shadow

Postby KingKivuli » April 14th, 2010, 2:01 am

King's Judgement

It took a while for the pride to gather outside the den, as most were scattered around the area and needed to be fetched and brought in. Zira and her gang how ever were the main targets of this meet and were plenty present. Simba was not going to waste any time. He marched over to Zira, getting right in her face 'Get down to the bottom of Priderock now, and take your gang with you' His voice was full of venom, and it was clear the king was restraining himself from lashing out. As Zira made her way down, with the cubs running behind, the last of the Pride showed up, including Kokota, Ashur and Zizi who joined Kivuli 'Whats going on?' Asked Zizi, who had never seen such a gathering before. 'It's trouble for Zira' replied Kivuli 'If I'm right, she is getting exiled' They shut up and watched the proceedings

Simba climbed up the slope to the tip of priderock, overlooking Zira and her rabble 'Zira you have broken our laws and now stand trail. You know what punishment awaits you. This is your last chance to regain some pride and honor' Zira stepped forward and spat on the ground 'I will never bow to the likes of you. Scar was the true king and his blood is on your paws murderer! I would sooner rot in hell than obey you again' Simba shook his head in sorrow, this was not what he wanted, but it needed to be done 'I gave you the chance and you throw it back. I hereby exile you and your followers to the outlands where you will remain. If you so much as enter our lands again, the punishment will be death. Go and live a life before I change my mind and take it now' Zira snarled and turned, without saying a word to leave

Kivuli sighed. It was over. He stood up and began to walk away but a booming voice came from behind 'Kivuli! Get down' It was Simba, ordering him to stand on trail like Zira just had been. Kivuli turned round, a general look of fear on his face, as he made his way down 'You too Kokota' Simba added. The friends looked stunned. What on earth could Simba have planned for the brothers? Kivuli had a good idea, yet that only involved him, so why was Kokota involved? As the brother re- united Kivuli was the one who made the first move 'Simba, i know what this is about, what you heard is wrong! Why would i want to take your place as king? You saved us and lifted the curse over the pridelands, why would i hinder that? And what does my brother have to do with this? He is innocent, let him go!'

Simba listened as Kivuli thought hard to stand his ground and save his brother, but the Kings mind was made up 'I know what I heard, and i saw the look on your face as Zira offered you the place of king. Part of you wanted it, i cant have a risk like you here in the Pridelands. As for your brother he is also a risk as I know if you both separate, you will find each other again. I'm doing this for the safety of the Pridelands. Please leave now and don't make this any harder' Kivuli snapped inside. The same anger than consumed him with Scar was back, but this time stronger and more controlled 'I swear Simba you will only live to regret this' Kivuli voice was deep and full of anger. He turned and walked off into the Pridelands, with Kokota following behind hanging his head in sadness. Zizi and Ashur attempted to give chase, but got blocked by the rest of the pride. Zizi buried her head into Ashur, as tears began running out of her eyes. They were helpless, as they watched their lifelong friends vanish into the horizon
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Re: The Legend Of The Shadow

Postby YFWE » April 16th, 2010, 11:48 pm

Seems like a bit of an uncharacteristic overreaction on Simba's part but to each their own. Now I wonder if Kivuli'll join up with Zira's group or if he'll forge for himself with his brother.
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Re: The Legend Of The Shadow

Postby KiarasMate » April 17th, 2010, 2:45 am

Nice new chapter as always KK. Still got those minor mistakes in there but still an enjoyable read none the less. Keep it up buddy and I'll stay tuned for the next installment. ^^
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Re: The Legend Of The Shadow

Postby KingKivuli » April 20th, 2010, 1:08 pm

well idk how long you have to wait cause that chapter marks the end of Part 2!!! who knows i may get off my backside and start Part 3 chapter 1 tonight idk just keep your eyes open :P

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Part 2:
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Paragraphs - 236
Words - 6692

Total:
Chapters - 26
Paragraphs - 524
Words - 16351
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Re: The Legend Of The Shadow

Postby Eli_Ayase » April 22nd, 2010, 2:51 pm

Whoa thats a cool story written
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Re: The Legend Of The Shadow

Postby KingKivuli » April 28th, 2010, 2:40 am

Part 3 Outcast - Barren Home

Kivuli and Kokota left the Pridelands with heavy hearts. The home they knew, they battled for, was now behind them. They now only had one place to go, follow Zira. Kivuli could have easy just ran off into the wild and vanish, yet he couldn't abandon his brother, his only true family left. it wasn’t going to be easy and Kivuli knew it. They had lost their friends and loved ones, and Zira was not going to be the most welcoming to them. The sun was already setting. What had started as a normal day turned into a nightmare. Kivuli and Kokota continued to walk on, neither saying a word, simply cause nothing could be said. One thing that was for sure though, Kivuli was tense almost ready to break, and his temper was high

The outlands came in sight for Zira and her gang, a destroyed desert for a lack of better description. There was no wildlife, apart from the odd rat and field mouse that ran around. The trees that existed were bare and looked burnt by the boiling sun. Water was also an issue, there was hardly any, not enough for the group Zira had, which was about 25, cubs included. As for the location, it was right near the graveyard, the hyena's old home before Scar's defeat and they ran away. Zira arrived at the head of the party. She let out a small growl, not enjoying the prospect of her new home 'Damn you Simba, I will have my revenge'. As the final members of the group came and tried to find a way to settle in, Nuka ran up to Zira with a disheartened look about him 'Mother are we going to be OK?' Zira glared at him from the corner of her eye 'We will be Nuka, we will be'. She walked off to go search the Outlands

It took Kivuli and his brother another hour to get to the Outlands, they had moved at a slow pace in order to put off what their new fate. Sadly for them every journey must have its ended, they just wish this place was not the end. The brothers wander in, deeper into the broken land. The deeper they went, the more of Zira's puppets they saw. One of which was Nuka, who ran off instantly to warn his mother. Kivuli ignored their looks. Kokota kept near his bothers side, who seemed more tense than ever. Another 10 minutes of walking brought them to a large hollowed out stone structure, that looked deformed and destroyed through time. It was the new den. Kivuli paced off from his brother, jumping up the rocks to reach one of the taller points. A voice suddenly called the gray beast from behind 'KIVULI!'. He snapped round on the spot, meeting eye to eye with his new rival, Scars mate 'Zira!' It was then Kivuli realised, this was going to harder than he first thought
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Re: The Legend Of The Shadow

Postby YFWE » April 28th, 2010, 4:08 am

Good chapter and great job on cleaning up the story a little bit too! Very interesting predicament Kivuli and his brother are in. Keep it up~
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Re: The Legend Of The Shadow

Postby KiarasMate » April 28th, 2010, 4:38 am

lol, almost there to a perfect chapter buddy. ^^ Nice introduction for the third part. Can't really say much more than that but yeah. ^^ Looking forward to more as always. :)
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Re: The Legend Of The Shadow

Postby KingKivuli » May 2nd, 2010, 12:11 am

Can't let go

Several months past, the warm spring air was beginning to cool down for the autumn and winter months. In the outlands however, it made little difference. The torched land was constantly hot with the glaring sun and no shade, while the winds scattered round dust and warm air. Slowly the outlanders were starting to become used to their new environment, but with lack of food and water most were beginning to grow thin and tired. There were two however that had kept their strong form. Kivuli and Kokota. Both of them had grown up quite a bit within the past few months. Kokota had gotten taller with more of his mane showing and muscles bulking up. Kivuli was very much the same, taller and stronger, he was almost beginning his early adulthood.

It was late afternoon, most of the Outlanders were training, under Ziras orders. She had plotted revenge against Simba, and was preparing for a war. She pushed everyone to their limits and further. Kivuli and Kokota didn't train with Zira however, as Kivuli was not to be pushed around by one of his rivals. Instead he did his own training away from the rest so not to be disturbed. When Kivuli wasn't training, he was up the highest point outside the den. From there he could see most of the land and surrounding area. More importantly though he could see the Pridelands and Priderock. Kivuli could stare for hours, plotting his own revenge and hopefully a plan to get rid of Zira at the same time

The gray beast was disturbed when a roar was heard from below. He turned to look, and found Kokota waiting for him. With skill and grace, Kivuli slid and clambered down the den to reach his kin. 'Hey Kivuli you ok?' asked Kokota, whose voice was beginning to break. Kivuli strolled over to his brother and smiled lightly 'I am fine brother. You look like you need to talk with me'. Kokota nodded and lead the way as the brothers walked side by side 'I think Zira suspects something. She can't work out how we stay in such strong physical form. I don't think she knows about us sneaking into the Pridelands for food at night, only the fact that we train'. Kivuli chuckled under his breath; his plan for Zira was working, keep her distracted and confused so he could work unhindered

It wasn't long before the brothers came across the main training ground. It was a flat open space, with rocks scattered round, and small waterholes surrounding it. Both lions walked up a small hill, over watching the training. As they reached the top they both lay down to observe what was going on 'Look at them Kokota, they got forced into a way of life by a crazy demented widow. It will be the end of them one way or another. You and me however, we have made our own life here we follow no one and do as we please'. Kokota grinned as he stared at the scene below him 'Thanks brother I owe you for this'. Kivuli didn't respond, he just continued to watch the brutality below

The sound of clashing fangs and claws was disturbed by the idiotic yelp of Nuka, running with Vitani and his side 'Mother, MOTHER!!! We have news you got to hear'. Zira turned on the spot to watch her son advance. She was watching the fighting below, making sure that everyone was following her orders. Kovu was sitting next to her. Vitani and Kovu had also grown abit since the exile. They were old enough to roam round on their own, not that Zira was letting Kovu out her sight. She had plans for him to help take Simba out. Zira turned to her son and sighed 'What is it now Nuka?'. The hyperactive lion bounced in front of Zira and Vitani followed calmly 'It happened mother, it happened. We saw it, with our own eyes! Simba...' Nuka was cut out by Vitani who finished the story in a calm manner 'Simba and Nala have had a cub, a baby girl'. Nuka promptly shut up, while Zira's eyes lit up

'A girl.... A Girl!' Zira screamed with joy causing everyone in the area to stop and listen. The same was true for Kivuli and Kokota, who slowly and carefully made their way closer to listen in. Zira continued with her little 'victory' 'Oh this is perfect, Simba has male heir, there has never been a queen ruling the Pridelands. We will either bide our time or just destroy Simba by force! This couldn't be more perfect!'. As Kivuli overheard the rant, he hatched a small plan. He got up and begin to walk away slowly 'Come on Kokota, we are going back to the Pridelands'. Kokota looked shocked at what he just heard 'Kivuli are you mad we would get killed, besides I thought you hated Simba?'. Kivuli Looked at his brother with his burning red eyes 'You don't have to come, but I will. As for Simba, yes it is HIM I hate not the pride. If Zira is threatening them, I still want to make sure they are ok'. Kokota looked even more confused than before, yet he knew from experience that question Kivuli's plans was not a good idea. Not cause he got mad, but cause he was generally right. So Kokota just nodded, and with that Kivuli dashed off in a trail of dust heading to the Pridelands
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