The Fallen Prince: Nuka's Renewal (Part 1 of TFP)

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Awesome! Such a great read!
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Re: The Fallen Prince

Postby Applejack » October 18th, 2009, 5:51 pm

These are both good points, actually. I will make clearer the second one in the next chapter I write. It will be all explained. He diddent FORGET Vitani... He's just been taught she was nothing but a dream. He's actually very confused.
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Re: The Fallen Prince

Postby KiarasMate » October 19th, 2009, 2:01 am

Ahh, okay. :) Thanks and I look forward to the next part. :)
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Re: The Fallen Prince

Postby Applejack » October 22nd, 2009, 8:40 pm

I've attempted to write this chapter for times, but... I'm brain dead... Anyone know how to rid of writers block besides erase the work?
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Re: The Fallen Prince

Postby CommandoTheLion » October 23rd, 2009, 4:19 am

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Re: The Fallen Prince

Postby Applejack » November 5th, 2009, 6:54 pm

Chapter Ten

The two raced, running from that dreaded prison. Then, all of a sudden, Kopa froze. Hiis sister tugged and pulled, hissing his name in his ear, but to no avail. He felt nothing. He heard nothing. Her brusque jabs to the side were ignored. His vision clouded over, and soon, he was viewing one of those dreams he constantly reinvisioned. It all made sense now! His hearing dropped back, and soon his whole being fell into the dream.

Vitani's paw was still on top of his at the moment before her exile. We'll cherish each other, always. Kopa nodded in agreement. Always, he echoed her. He turned his face to her and gave her a small lick on the cheek, then lightly pulled himself up. Vitani, he said. sighing, I'll miss you. A single tear slid down his cheek, falling to the ground. He forced himself to turn away. He wanted this to be as painless as possible for her. He walked down the rock, not turning back.

Days melted into months, and soon enough, his sister was old enough to run around and play. He had heard that she had met Zira's son, Kovu. One morning, he found himself aimlessly tracing in the dirt outside of the rock. Looking down, he sighed. He saw that he had traced a small heart with a K and a V, a line dividing the two letters down the center. A cough came from behind and he noticed his father standing there. Son, he said, It is time for you to leave this dream lioness Vitani in the past. For the last time. She. Is. Not. Real. Simba took his paw and swiped the heart away, sealing her forever as a memory.


Kopa shook his head, the dream dissipating. His sister was now franticly shaking him. Looking around, he was why. Outlanders had encircled the two of them Probably Zira's Guards. His normally darker blue eyes hardened, lightening to a determined icey blue. "She's real," he hissed, "And I'll prove it someday. I'll save her." Without another word, he nodded to his sister. Both splitting up, they shot under a lioness. Kopa lashed out at one leg, Kiara the other, and the lioness fell, roaring. Without a second glance, the two cubs shot off towards the pridelands.

Once they were far enough away from the outlands, Kopa stopped. He looked around. They were at the Oasis near the Jungle and the Pridelands borders. Neither Prideland nor Outland. "We rest here," Kopa said, sitting back on his haunches. For once, without a complaint or interjection, Kiara nodded. She curled up and lay down next to him, falling asleep. He nodded himself. There was nothing he could do but wait, so wait he would. He fell asleep with one eye open, watching for danger.
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Re: The Fallen Prince

Postby Applejack » November 5th, 2009, 8:41 pm

Chapter Eleven
Light and heat were the first things that crossed Nuka's mind as he groggily stretched, eyes still pressed shut. The familiar dry, unbearable heat, nothing at all like the lush, cool breeze he enjoyed as a cub in the Pridelands. Light, a dusty light. He pried his eyes open. Vitani lay across from him, sleeping. Now in her late teens, she rolled over, yawning. Shaking her head free of sleep, she quickly sat up, glaring at Nuka. "What're you looking at, Nuka," she demanded. Nuka chuckled, watching her simmer. "Oh, nothing Vitani. Its nothing," He said, stretching. He got up and started to walk out. "Although," He added, turning his head to her as he walked, "You could tell me who this Kopa fellow you talk about in your sleep is." He smirked and walked out of the den, leaving a wide eyed Vitani in his wake. "Talking in my sleep..." she whispered. She fell back, wondering what all Nuka might have heard.

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Nuka smirked as he made his way to Zira. He would outdo himself with this one. Vitani and Kovu could only wish that they were him. Zira, in all of her glory, was laying on a large rock, enjoying a sunbath. "Mother," Nuka called in a singsong voice, "I've got something to report!" Zira looked down at him. "what is it this time, Nuka." She responded, rolling over. Nuka sat down, a large grin on his face. "It seems," he said, "That Simba's daughter's first hunt is comming soon. She is of ample age, and not too bright."

Zira's eyes lit up. "This is good,"she said, almost purring, "This is very good. Well done, Nuka. Perhaps you'll actually amount to something more than a worthless son after all." Nuka's eyes glowed with pride. [b]"Perhaps I could kill her while she hunts?" Zira shook her head. "No," She said. "I've a plan that involves Kovu." Nuka, now intrigued, cocked his head. "Do I get to help?"
"Your role will be vital to the sucess of the plan," Zira said. She stood up, and nuka looked around himself. Many lionesses were around him, encircling the rock. To his left stood Kovu, proud and tall. On his right, Vitani, fearfully leaning on Nuka. He rolled his eyes, but adjusted himself so her head rested on his side. He briefly focused on her rythems. She was shivering Violently. Zir smirked. "Nuka, Vitani." She said. The pair stepped forward. In unison, they said, "Yes, Mother."

"You two are to go the the elephant graveyard. Your charge is gathering drywood and lighting them on fire from the melting pots there. Once lit, you will go not far from where Kiara is hunting and light a fire. Then, it is all up to Kovu, who knows what he is to do." Nuka and Vitani nodded. [b]"It will be done, mother," they said, stepping back into the ring. "Now," Zira said. "Leave me in peace." With that, the circle broke up.
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Re: The Fallen Prince

Postby Röckandi » November 5th, 2009, 8:48 pm

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Re: The Fallen Prince

Postby KiarasMate » November 5th, 2009, 11:46 pm

Very nice new chapters NukaKun. ^^ I think you tied up the loose ends nicely and your story is flowing smoothly in my opinion. :) Looking forward to reading more as you post it and keep up the fantastic work my friend. ^^
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Re: The Fallen Prince

Postby LadyAislinn » November 6th, 2009, 12:39 am

Wait I think I mighta skipped a chapter... did Zira ever find out Vitani let them free? :D I like the way it's coming along the whole Vitani/Kopa romance thing is cute. :)
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Re: The Fallen Prince

Postby CommandoTheLion » November 6th, 2009, 5:01 am

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