Where's Kopa?

[KopsTheTerminator]

I like the story so far =) I can't wait to read more!

[CommandoTheLion]

i like it very nice cant wait till more

[KopsTheTerminator]

Are you gonna continue this, Yumacub? You haven't posted for a month.

[Yumacub]

Simba continued, "Zira wait!" Kopa screamed. She didn't listen, she smacked him with her paw, claws unsheathed at his face...Kopa had two scars on his nose. He slowly got up and started running towards Priderock. "DAAAD!! DAD!" Kopa was running fast. But Zira, being an adult caught up with him quickly, grabbed him by the throat with her jaws and swung him backwards, making him fly upwards and hitting a nearby tree. "Ahh!" Kopa fell on a branch, he was weak. Zira laughed. "What's the matter little kitty, stuck in a tree?" She asked in her inocent tone. Kopa passed out, and Simba, hearing Kopa's cry for help, came running out of Priderock and he saw Zira. "ZIRA!! What is the meaning of this?!" Zira grinned evily. "I'm getting my revenge! I'm going to kill your son!" She jumped right up at the tree so fast, and Simba was too late; Zira picked up the cub and threw him high over Simba's head. Simba ran to him and said, "Kopa? Kopa!?" Simba put his head down to Kopa's chest...No breathing. Zira laughed behind Simba. "Now we're even..."

[Baya]

Wow...this is...very dark xD

I don't condone child abuse... xD

[CommandoTheLion]

Wow very nice xD

[Applejack]

Poor Kopa. He was so one of my favorites. Well, Zira got half of what she wanted.

[KopsTheTerminator]

Omg, how could Zira do this to an innocent child? Kopa had nothing to do with Scar, why did he have to die? This is one of the reasons I like Scar more. He isn't that insane... Still, good fan-fic!

[Yumacub]

Simba lowered his head. Zira waited for a reaction. Faster than she expected, Simba turned around sharply at pinned Zira down. "HE WAS INNOCENT ZIRA!!A CUB IS NOT THE REASON SCAR DIED! THE HYENAS-" "NOOO!! SCAR DIED BECAUSE OF YOU SIMBA!SCAR WAS THE RIGHTFUL KING AND YOU OVERTHREW HIM!THE HYENAS WERE HIS FOLLOWERS!WHY WOULD THEY KILL HIM?!" "BECAUSE SCAR SAID THEY WERE THE REAL ENEMIES IN FRONT OF ME, TO SAVE HIS OWN BEHIND!" Simba bit and tore off part of Zira's right ear, leaving a notch."I exile you!Leave now..." She got out and under Simba growling ferociously. He picked up Kopa and began running to Priderock. Zira narrowed her eyes and went to the Outlands, Nuka hiding behind a rock the whole time, his skinny cubbish body, followed her.

[KopsTheTerminator]

The story is pretty good, but think you rushed a little in the last two chapters. Try to add more details and dialogs to make the story more interesting. (Well my story is suckish >.<) Other than that, it's all good.