Hatari's story (By TheWhistlerify [PG-13])
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Re: Hatari's story (By TheWhistlerify)
by divsalley » October 17th, 2010, 4:33 am
this seems interesting... I'd really like to see where this goes... Keep writing!!!
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Re: Hatari's story (By TheWhistlerify)
by xLilacVixenx » October 17th, 2010, 4:49 am
All I can say for this fan-fiction is wow. To begin with, I have only read the first chapter and I was instantly intrigued; I could perfectly picture the story as if it was a movie in my head. Hatari's dream was very interesting in my opinion; a very eerie nature to it that was utterly believable and reminded me of Balto 2.
Every now and then you forgot commas when the characters were refering to each other, but if that is part of your writing style I urge you to continue. It slightly bothere me that Hatari's brother imagined thunder bolts from lions, but I greatly appreciated that you specified about it before the fan-fiction.
I look forward to reading those other chapters and I encourage you to keep up your excellent skill.
Every now and then you forgot commas when the characters were refering to each other, but if that is part of your writing style I urge you to continue. It slightly bothere me that Hatari's brother imagined thunder bolts from lions, but I greatly appreciated that you specified about it before the fan-fiction.
I look forward to reading those other chapters and I encourage you to keep up your excellent skill.
'Cause you're beautiful. Like no other. Flawless, absolutely flawless.
<3
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Re: Hatari's story (By TheWhistlerify)
by TheWhistlerify » December 11th, 2010, 6:33 pm
Chapter 3 is up.
After 2 months in which I forgot I was writing this and 2 hours in development, hopefully it would have been worth the wait =O
After 2 months in which I forgot I was writing this and 2 hours in development, hopefully it would have been worth the wait =O
Sometimes I simply sit down and write because I cannot help it. Who knows, perhaps one day something will come out of it. Writing is the only thing that, when I do it, I don't feel I should be doing something else.
My 'The Lion King' fanfic: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10370841/1/
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My 'The Lion King' fanfic: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10370841/1/
My 'Pokémon' fanfic: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/9017329/1/
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