Life in the Pridelands
Re: Life in the Pridelands
by Azdgari » April 4th, 2010, 5:02 am
Short chapter, but updated nonetheless! =]
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Re: Life in the Pridelands
by Kina » April 4th, 2010, 7:22 pm
Heh, great chapter, Azdgari. It was pretty cute, too. ^_^
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Re: Life in the Pridelands
by PrincessKiara » April 5th, 2010, 2:09 am
Nice chapter, interesting to be introduced to your OC.
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Re: Life in the Pridelands
by Azdgari » April 5th, 2010, 5:38 am
Update...? =P
In fact, I decided the last chapter was too short, so this was just added on.
Just curious and looking for feedback, would people be opposed to me writing a fair number of "lazy days" chapters? I know action is great, and there will be some, but I'd enjoy, once I have a few more OCs settled in, just watching how everybody interacts with one another and develops. The tree pride and Zira have not been forgotten, but I purposely gave myself some time on that end so that I would have time to develop everyone in the Pridelands before things got heavy.
Haha, I also just noticed there's a subcanon named Tama... I didn't mean to take that one. I actually named her after the drum company... xD
In fact, I decided the last chapter was too short, so this was just added on.
Just curious and looking for feedback, would people be opposed to me writing a fair number of "lazy days" chapters? I know action is great, and there will be some, but I'd enjoy, once I have a few more OCs settled in, just watching how everybody interacts with one another and develops. The tree pride and Zira have not been forgotten, but I purposely gave myself some time on that end so that I would have time to develop everyone in the Pridelands before things got heavy.
Haha, I also just noticed there's a subcanon named Tama... I didn't mean to take that one. I actually named her after the drum company... xD
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Re: Life in the Pridelands
by Kina » April 5th, 2010, 7:31 pm
Your addition certainly helped flesh things out more, Azdgari. ^_^
And, really? Where was the subcanon Tama from? XD. (I've only read the LK books online, I haven't found the other things.)
And, really? Where was the subcanon Tama from? XD. (I've only read the LK books online, I haven't found the other things.)
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Re: Life in the Pridelands
by PrincessKiara » April 5th, 2010, 8:25 pm
Another great addition to the story! 
I think you’ve really managed to capture the spirit of the characters from the film.
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Re: Life in the Pridelands
by Azdgari » April 7th, 2010, 12:11 pm
Update. =]
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Re: Life in the Pridelands
by SimbasMate » April 7th, 2010, 12:39 pm
This fan fiction is going by really good, Azdgari! I look forward to the next update. I really love your style of writing. Keep it coming, buddy!
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Re: Life in the Pridelands
by TheWhistlerify » April 8th, 2010, 9:09 pm
Very nice so far!
Only things that disturbed me were that you sometimes write Kovu instead of Kivu, and you sometimes leave out the " around the character's words / lines/ chat.
Also sometimes I can't understand if the character is talking or thinking to him self, if you could put dialog and thoughts in a different font or make it more easier for the eye to catch that could be useful =]
Only things that disturbed me were that you sometimes write Kovu instead of Kivu, and you sometimes leave out the " around the character's words / lines/ chat.
Also sometimes I can't understand if the character is talking or thinking to him self, if you could put dialog and thoughts in a different font or make it more easier for the eye to catch that could be useful =]
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Re: Life in the Pridelands
by Azdgari » April 8th, 2010, 10:18 pm
Blast, I forgot that when I paste from Word to here it doesn't carry over Italics. >.<
Thanks for pointing that out. Can you point out where I mixed up Kivu and Kovu? Thanks. =]
Thanks for pointing that out. Can you point out where I mixed up Kivu and Kovu? Thanks. =]
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