An ambush

An ambush

Postby KopsTheTerminator » March 2nd, 2010, 6:38 pm

An ambush

Type of Fan-Fiction: Missing character explanation.
Length: Short.
Warning: Gore.
Author: Kopa23.
Characters: Mheetu, Zira, Nuka and the Outsiders.
Plot: An ambush is set up on teen Mheetu and Zira is planning to kill him.
Location: Pride Lands
Time: Afternoon


Mheetu's eyes widened. The mysterious pride had surrounded him. He couldn't really see their faces because they were hidden in the tall grass. Mheetu got a defensive stand and yelled at the lionesses.

''Who are you and why are you doing this?'' the teen lion asked.

''You can guess who we are, can't you? Well, we're doing this because you're also one of Simba's possible heirs! You must be eliminated!'' a lioness said.

Mheetu was shocked. This was Zira's voice, his own stepmother during Scar's reign after his mother's death! Horrible memories passed though Mheetu's mind. Scar's reign was a horrible memory to Mheetu. Many cubs and lionesses were murdered and a lot of lionesses died of hunger, but Scar wouldn't care less. The hyenas had almost killed him and Nala and finally, Scar killed Sarafina after an argument he had with her. Mheetu had to run away and come back when Scar was overthrown by Simba, Mufasa's long lost heir. But he was never told if someone helped Scar kill his precious mother. An ever more horrible thought came into Mheetu's mind.

''Did you help Scar kill my mother?! Mheetu yelled angrily at Zira.

''Oh, you're a really clever lion, Mheetu. I indeed did. But don't worry, you'll soon be joining her!'' said Zira with laugh.

Mheetu growled at Zira and attacked her. Although he knew he couldn't kill her, he wanted to get revenge. He managed to pin her down. Zira smiled evilly at young Mheetu.

''You really think you're gonna kill me, don't you Mheetu? Well, you're a fool! Now the whole pride knows where you exactly are!'' Zira told him calmly. The lionesses came closer at them. They waited for Zira's signal. Mheetu got off Zira, but before he could run away, Zira yelled.

''ATTACK!''

Zira's pride attacked the young lion. Mheetu dodged some of the hits, but the lionesses had injured him. His back was slightly bleeding. The lionesses weren't totally surrounding him anymore. When Mheetu got the chance, he started running away from the area. He didn't stop to see behind him. All he heard was his breathing, Zira's voice saying to chase him down and some angry growls. He finally turned behind him to see what's happening. The outsiders had lost him... But they could still hear him.

''You idiots! Is it that hard to find and kill a teen lion?! How are we going to kill that brat Simba that way!? Keep searching for him!!'' Zira angrily yelled at her pride.

''They mustn't find me or I'm done for...'' he whispered to himself as he sneaked in the tall grass, heading to Pride Rock. The sun was getting lower and lower. Mheetu could feel the lionesses getting closer to him, when he finally saw one standing in front of him!

''I've found the teen!'' the lioness yelled. The rest of the lionesses approached her, Zira including. Mheetu looked around him; the lionesses had surrounded him again. Zira stood in front of an angry yet afraid Mheetu.

''You really thought that a teen like you would manage to escape from an entire pride of adults? How foolish you are, Mheetu. You're so naive and innocent that even my beloved Scar would pity your fate.'' Zira said and smirked.

''Simba will kill you for what you're about to do! It's no use, Zira!'' Mheetu yelled.

''Oh no, he won't, Mheetu... We'll get sure of that. Besides, that wouldn't stop us of killing you...'' She said, and all the lionesses attacked Mheetu. Mheetu was left severely injured when Zira yelled, ''Stop!!'' A silence followed for a few moments. The lionesses looked at Zira. Leave this to Nuka. she said and behind a tree, an upset-looking Nuka appeared.

Finish him off, Nuka. said Zira.

But mother, he's my-

NOW, Nuka! Zira yelled.

Nuka first hesitated, but Zira's angry look made him walk in front of Mheetu. Mheetu looked at his friend with a sad look. Nuka frowned, seeing Mheetu bleeding. He had never felt so awful and guilty in his entire life. He slowly raised his front paw, and whispered to Mheetu, tearing, ''Forgive me..'' and slashed Mheetu.

It was night. The sun had finally set, taking a young lion's life with it.

The End
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Re: An ambush

Postby LadyAislinn » March 2nd, 2010, 6:46 pm

Aww it made me teary-eyed. Good job buddy... nice writing. :)
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Re: An ambush

Postby KopsTheTerminator » March 2nd, 2010, 6:48 pm

Thank you! C: I appreciate it. ^^
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Re: An ambush

Postby YFWE » March 2nd, 2010, 8:08 pm

Good writing. Really sad, but I for one like stories like this that capture a mere scene of a story rather than an entire story itself--you know, kind of the one-shot setup. Takes much less time to read and packs a bigger punch with a smaller word count. Zira having Nuka finish Mheetu off just added to the diabolical nature of both her character and the story itself. Really liked this snapshot of a broader story. I think the only thing I could possibly dislike was the use of the word 'teen' constantly; there other words that could've been used and it seemed a little out of place after the fourth time, but it's really not a big deal at all. Very good job! =D
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Re: An ambush

Postby KopsTheTerminator » March 4th, 2010, 1:32 pm

Thank you :) I'm planning to write more little stories like this C: And another chapter of Paswa's Quest, of course xD
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Re: An ambush

Postby KiarasMate » March 4th, 2010, 11:07 pm

This was a short but enjoyable story you wrote here Peenut. :) Nice portrayal of Zira's character and pretty good writing. :) Can't really say much more than that but keep up the awesome work my friend and I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. ^^
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