Nuka's Return

Nuka's Return

Postby KovusTrueMate » December 14th, 2009, 12:00 am

Nuka’s Return
By: Kovu427

Chapter1: The Search




“Ohhhhhhh… Mother, Vitani?” moaned Nuka. He was injured, weak, and hungry. It was late at night. His paws were bleeding, his back was scarred all over, and he had splinters in his hind paws. He pushed the logs off of him and started carefully going down the huge pile. Once Nuka reached the bottom he started looking for the pride. Zira, Vitani, Kovu, anyone. “MOTHER? VITANI? KOVU?” he yelled. There was no answer. He limped over to the side and attempted to climb up and fell back several times. After a while, he finally reached the top and fell to the ground out of exhaustion. “Where am I? Where are Mother and Vitani?” he whispered to himself. After a matter of minutes, he fell asleep.

After he woke up early the next morning, he went wandering around trying to find the pride. He trudged and he tried to ignore the stabbing pain in his paws and back. After a while of exhausting search, he found a zebra. “I can’t believe my luck!” he thought. He got up closer and pounced on the unsuspecting zebra. After Nuka finished eating, he walked to a nearby pond and began drinking all he could to hydrate himself. It was late afternoon and there was no sign of Zira, Vitani, OR Kovu! “I’ll keep looking. I won’t stop until I find them.” Nuka said to himself. He soon came upon the jungle between the Pridelands and Outlands. He examined the environment and thought, “Maybe they’re in here!” He wanders into the jungle only to find nothing but vegetation and mountains. He found a few animals, none of which were lions.

It was late evening and Nuka knew he had to find shelter soon before nightfall. He soon comes upon a very small pride of lionesses and he asks if they could share their den with him. They ask him why and he says he’ll explain later. The lionesses shrug and agree to let him in their pride. He greatly thanks them and follows them to the den. When they reached the den one of the lionesses said, “Allow us to introduce ourselves. My name is Nzuri.” The lioness next to her said, “I’m Kuchoka.” Then the lioness on the far end said, “I’m Nadhifu.” The lioness in the middle said, “I’m Rahisi.” and the lioness next to her said “And my name is Tamaa.” Then Tamaa said, “What’s your name?” Then Nuka replies, “My name is Nuka and I’m exhausted” Then Nadhifu says, “Come on inside, Nuka. Our den is your den.” Nuka doesn’t say a word, he just walks over to the middle of the den and collapses in a heap. In just a few seconds he was asleep. The lionesses smiled at one another and went into their den and could see the Nuka was freezing cold, so they decided to warm him up with a blanket of grass. After Nuka was covered in the warm grass, the other lionesses fell asleep. 4 of the 5 lionesses were heaped up in the corner. Whereas Tamaa slept by Nuka’s side… :idea2:

To Be Continued…
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Re: Nuka's Return

Postby LadyAnette » December 14th, 2009, 12:03 am

Very cool so far! ;D
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Re: Nuka's Return

Postby CheetahCat » December 14th, 2009, 1:00 am

I'm enjoying this Fan Fiction thus far, Kovu. ^^ You're doing a nice job my friend and I'm looking forward of reading your next part. :) Keep up the fabulous work and I know this story will turn out awesome. ^^
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Re: Nuka's Return

Postby KiarasMate » December 14th, 2009, 1:04 am

A very nice start to what seems like a very interesting Fan Fic you've written here Kovu427. :) There's not a whole lot of Nuka stories out there, so this should be unique. It takes a bit of imagination to think that Nuka survived after the events of TLK2SP but I think this still could work nicely. :) Only suggestion I have for you in regards to your writing style is to try and keep to one pre-tense. lol, this is always hard to explain, but it seems like your story sometimes shifts from the present-tense, to the past-tense, then back again, as in how you present the events as they unfold. Yeah, it's really confusing to try and explain and sorry if that makes no sense at all. lol. It's still a nice story though and I look forward to reading more as you post it. :) Keep up the awesome work my friend. ^^
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Re: Nuka's Return

Postby LadyAnette » December 14th, 2009, 2:04 am

I like that Nuka came back! 8-) ROCK ON NUKA!!!
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Re: Nuka's Return

Postby KovusTrueMate » December 14th, 2009, 3:46 am

Thank you for the nice comments and all the advice I've been given. This one took a really long time. I hope you enjoy it!

Chapter 2: The Curiosity Begins

The next morning when Nuka woke up, the other lionesses were already awake. Except for Tamaa. He had just then realized that she was sleeping right next to him. Feeling comforted by her body heat, he lay his head on her shoulder and went back to sleep. In his dream, he saw Zira, Kovu, Vitani, and all the other Outsiders. The questions still were fresh in his mind. “Where am I? Where are Mother and Vitani? What if Mother and Vitani are dead? What will I do? How will I find my way to the Pridelands?” During his dream, his mother was happy, he was king, and Kovu was his servant. There was lots of food and water. They had overthrown Simba and the Pridelanders. Just then, he was woken up by the lionesses. Rahisi said, “Here, this is for you, because we thought you were hungry.” Then she nuzzled 1/5 of a zebra leg over to him. He ate it slowly, savoring each bite. Then Nuka regained his strength and started asking questions. “Where am I? Am I close to the Pridelands?” Nuka asked. Kochuka responded, “You’re in the far side of the Elephant Graveyard several miles away from the Pridelands. “I must get to the pridelands, my family might be there.” Nuka said.

A few miles across the Elephant Graveyard, Nuka began to wonder why these lionesses took pity on him. Was it because they were willing to help? Or because they wanted something from him? Then Nadhifu says, “How did you get here anyway? What happened?” “I was crushed by logs but regained consciousness. I went searching for my pride but no one was around. I climbed up the side of the canyon I was in and collapsed asleep. Then the next morning I went searching the Pridelands and the jungle for them and no one showed up there either. Then I met you 5.” Replied Nuka. Then Tamaa affectionately brushed her tail under his muzzle as she walked past him. He wondered why Tamaa seemed to always act affectionately toward him. No lioness has ever acted affectionately toward him like that. Nuka decided he didn’t care, and just started to accept it.

The sun was starting to set and Nzuri said, “The sun is setting and it will be dark soon. We must find shelter.” Nuka and the others agreed, then Nuka spotted a small cave just big enough for all of them, but they would have to be close together. Nzuri, Kuchoka, Nadhifu, Rahisi, barely minded. Tamaa didn’t seem to mind at all. Just as the moon started to appear, they all were crowded in the cave. Tamaa right by Nuka’s side again, and the other lionesses in other locations scattered. “Goodnight.” Tamaa whispered to Nuka. “Goodnight.” Nuka whispered back. By then Nuka found it pretty self-evident that Tamaa liked him, maybe even loved him. Nuka thought to himself, “Why is Tamaa so interested in me? I’ve never been loved by any lioness but Mother.”

The next morning, Nuka woke up first and began hunting for anything worth eating. He found a small, helpless hyena and brought it back for the others to eat. He cut it into 5 equal halves and one, slightly bigger half which he gave to Tamaa. After they finished eating, they began walking toward the Pridelands. By mid afternoon, Pride Rock was in sight. He could see two figures on top of Pride Rock. But they were still too far away to see. It was early evening, and Pride Rock was closer now. Close enough so that Nuka could make out a lioness and a lion that looked a lot like his brother Kovu. “Wait a minute…” Nuka thought. “That IS Kovu! And that looks like Simba’s daughter Kiara! That traitor! Wait, since Kovu’s there, Mother and Vitani must be too! Nuka started running towards Pride Rock and then tripped on a bug. The other lionesses started giggling, but Tamaa wasn’t laughing at all. She nuzzled him up to his feet, and they continued walking, Tamaa by Nuka’s side.

To Be Continued…
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Re: Nuka's Return

Postby KiarasMate » December 14th, 2009, 5:28 am

Another nice chapter. ^^ The love interest angle seems compelling enough. Same sort of suggestion as before though, and also you might want to draw out your scenes a bit more too. They feel a bit stale in a way, as it's just one thing right after another. It's best to give your reader a bit of time with each scene before you add in a new story element. :) This is just constructive criticism though, so take it as you want to. Either way, your story is coming along nicely and I look forward to reading more. :)
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Re: Nuka's Return

Postby CheetahCat » December 15th, 2009, 1:04 am

Another nice chapter in your already inspirational Fan Fiction my friend. ^^ I like how this is going thus far. hehe. :) Some of the scenes seem a bit too short though, maybe in your next chapter, you can make them a bit more lengthy. ^^ Just a small tip. I'm not trying to sound mean or anything, I'm just trying to help you is all. ^^

I'm looking forward of reading your next chapter my friend, keep up the magnificent work! :)
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Re: Nuka's Return

Postby K0PA » January 24th, 2011, 3:16 pm

this is a very intrasting fan fintion good job
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Re: Nuka's Return

Postby Chumvikingpride » January 24th, 2011, 5:27 pm

Nuka was a lover? That is good for him, he is seen as not very nice
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