The Legend Of The Shadow

Re: The Legend Of The Shadow

Postby KiarasMate » January 27th, 2010, 11:46 pm

Nice new chapter here KK. ^^ A tad bit on the short side again and a little lacking on story progression for my likings but still, nice to see a new part to your awesome story buddy. ^^ Hoping things will pick up again soon and hopefully your next chapter will be longer. Either way though, I'll continue to follow this one no matter what. :)
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Re: The Legend Of The Shadow

Postby YFWE » January 28th, 2010, 12:12 am

Good addition to your story! A little on the short side, but it certainly wasn't boring by any means. I'm very interested to see what happens when/if Kivuli does end up challenging Simba! That should be quite exciting.
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Re: The Legend Of The Shadow

Postby KingKivuli » January 28th, 2010, 12:23 pm

well i will take KM's previous advice and keep my mouth shut about the upcoming events. i do however have a thread in my den open t further questions if anyones interested :) just dont expect an answer you after all the time :P
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Re: The Legend Of The Shadow

Postby KingKivuli » February 19th, 2010, 7:47 pm

Zizi's concern

As the royal couple continued their walk, Kivuli and Zizi caught sight of them on the way home. The young pair walked over and Kivuli greeted them 'Morning Simba, Nala. How are you both?' Simba and Nala both turned their heads to see their daughter and friend 'Morning' Simba responded 'We are doing well, Nala just told me she thinks you could take me in a fight' Kivuli gave Nala a slightly sly look, before returning his gaze to Simba 'Is that so? Well I guess at some point we will just have to find out' Kivuli gave Simba a sly grin 'We will see Kivuli, but if you'll excuse us, we would like to have some private time' Kivuli nodded and began to walk back

Kivuli looked back and noticed that Zizi was stood in place 'Zi, are you not coming?' The young female looked at Simba and then back at Kivuli 'Id like to talk with my parents first, go ahead ill catch up' Knowing that arguing with Zizi was pointless, Kivuli walked off ahead, leaving Zizi with Simba and Nala. Once he was out of range, Simba turned to his daughter 'Are you ok? Whats the matter?' Zizi settled herself down, she was feeling a little uneasy 'Well, its Zira. I don't know why but I just get the scariest feeling round her. Kivuli says it should be fine but i thought it would be best to let you know'

Simba came over to his daughter and gave her a hug 'It's alright ill keep my eyes open don't you worry. Go on now and be with your friends, if anything does happen i know they will protect you' Zizi broke out of the hug and looked up smiling 'Thanks daddy, I will' The young feline then raced off to catch up to Kivuli, leaving Simba alone with Nala again. The two continued their walk to the waterhole, enjoying what the new day had brought them

One there, and their thirst quenched, Nala reflected on what Zizi had told them 'What do you make of what Zi said?' Simba, who was still busy gulping down water pulled his head up and looked over while drops of water fell off his muzzle 'It seems like shes picking up on something. We both know Zira has been acting weird lately, the fact our own daughter suspects something too just makes me think that something really is going on' Nala nodded before suddenly holding her tummy 'Nala are you ok?' Through her pants and gasps, she responded 'I'm fine, the baby is just kicking alot. We should head home' With that they departed back, hoping that their suspicions were just that
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Re: The Legend Of The Shadow

Postby KiarasMate » February 19th, 2010, 7:52 pm

Nice new little chapter you added here KK. ^^ Was wondering when the next installment to your Fan Fic would be and I guess I got my answer now. :) Looking forward to the next part and keep up the awesome work as always buddy. :)
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Re: The Legend Of The Shadow

Postby KingKivuli » February 19th, 2010, 7:59 pm

thank you KM as always im glad you enjoying it and dont worry hopefully the next part will be out soon
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Re: The Legend Of The Shadow

Postby YFWE » February 19th, 2010, 8:57 pm

Lovely chapter! On the short side as always, but it moved the story along nicely, especially with Mila revealing her suspicions about Zira to her parents. Should be an interesting next few chapters.
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Re: The Legend Of The Shadow

Postby KingKivuli » February 19th, 2010, 9:30 pm

i have them 'short' as it splits up scenes, i dont want to suddenly jump from a love scene to a massive fight in 1 for for example
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Re: The Legend Of The Shadow

Postby YFWE » February 19th, 2010, 11:11 pm

Yeah, that's completely understandable. Whatever works best for you is just fine! ^^
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Re: The Legend Of The Shadow

Postby KingKivuli » February 19th, 2010, 11:17 pm

Nuka's Big Mouth

By the time Simba and Nala began the journey home, Kivuli and Zizi were almost there. They could see the pride over priderock, waking up and beginning their daily activities. The most noticeable of these was the hunting party, lead by Sarabi, heading out to find the days food. As they drew closer Zizi had an evil looking grin on her face 'Hey Kivu, wanna race?' He looked back at his friend and replied 'Ok sure your on' Both of the felines stopped and readied themselves for the race. Zizi began the countdown '3, 2, 1. GO!' The race had begun, at least for Zizi. Kivuli was on the floor and no wonder. His cheeky friend had tripped him up at the start line. He regained his feet and gave chase, hoping to catch up

The chase was going well, Kivuli was gaining ground as the two raced up the side of priderock. Zizi still had the edge as she reached the entrance of the main den first. Kivuli wasn't too far behind, and caught sight of her running round the other side back to their own den. As Kivuli ran forward however he was met with a collision. It was Nuka who was charging out the main den. Kivuli stumbled a little, but Nuka was small and the force knoked him clean off his feet. Kivuli trotted over to the smelly lion to see if he was fine 'Hey Nuka you ok?' Nuka jumped to his feet, a little startled 'Oh Kivuli hi, yeah im fine sorry about that' He was rather skitish and jumpy, which made him seem a little crazy

'Where were you off too in such a hurry anyway?' Kivuli inquired 'Who me? Oh no where just to see mother, she and the other lionesses are having a private talk and she wants me there, nothing big. Oh well got to go' Nuka ran off. He he had been getting more and more insane with each passing moment in the conversation. Kivuli thought to himself 'Private talk? What the hell is that all about? We are a pride, no one keeps any real secrets from anyone. I need to check this out' Kivuli continued his run round to his den where the others were. One there Zizi greeted him 'Haha beat you slow poke' She stuck her tongue out at him. Kivuli looked in. Ashur and Kokota were awake and joined them

'Hey you guys whats up' Kivuli greeted his lion friends 'And Zi you only won cause you tripped me up' She responded by a few short giggles. 'Hey bro, why is it that when we wake up you and Zi are always away huh?' asked Kokota, only to be backed up by Ashur 'Yeah Kivuli, something going on between the two of you we should know about hmmmm?' Kivuli and Zizi were dumb founded 'What? NO! How can you guys suggest that. We are just friends nothing more' Kivuli's cheeks were blushing slightly, but the sunshine behind blinded Ashur and Kokota to that fact

After a brief moment of awkwardness Kokota spoke up 'Anyway bro whats up, you looked a little concerned when you came in' Kivuli should have known better than to try hiding things from his brother. He looked over at Zizi 'Zi, I think i may have made a mistake before about Zira. I just ran into Nuka, he was acting more crazy than usual, and mentioned something about a private talk with members of the pride' Ashur and Kokota fell silent as Zizi replied 'I knew it! We have to tell my father' Kivuli stopped her from leaving 'No he wants time with Nala and we can't jump to conclusions, I say we check this out for ourselves first'

Kivuli looked round his small group, all of them agreed. 'Good, we helped save priderock before maybe we can do it again, but no fighting this time. We simply go and find out whats going on' Ashur then perked up looking confused 'Hang on where do we look for them?' Kivuli gave a menacing laugh 'Nuka. He can be smelt a mile away, he will lead us to them, we just need to keep our noses sharp and follow his trail. Lets go' With that, the group set off on their hunt for Nuka
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