Woeler's Poetry

[Woeler]

Feedback please...

[KopsTheTerminator]

These deserve much more attention than some other threads here.

[Woeler]

In the past we played outside
In the break outside of school
We had a lot of dreams
Because life was young and never cruel

One became a football player
The other drove a bus
We believed in our future
Because the teacher had told us

You can become everything you want
As long as your homework's done
But you have to be patient
Until you're big and strong

Is this the future?
Is this the future, Is this the result?
A certificate full of lies
Which states you're an adult

Is this the future?
Is this the future, Who gives a damn?
I know nothing about life
I still don't know who I am

We all still play a game
But no longer at school
And most of us became
What we thought wasn't cool

We're all adults
At least that is what they say
This whole chaos called life
Shouldn't it be more than gray?

Is this the future?
Is this the future, no more youth?
A certificate full of lies
Which states you know the truth

Is this the future?
Is this the future, Who gives a damn?
I know nothing about life
I still don't know who I am

Is this the future?

[Woeler]

If anyone can tell me what my poem is about they'll get a cookie!

The sky is cold
The king is dead
March homewards men
it's over

Returning

The kingdom bleeds
A red arrow
Pierced
Its blue heart

Returning

For country, for glory
Picked up the weapon
A life for the good
Of a kingdom

Returning

Lives taken for granted
Who let it happen
The great era of power
Is over

The Northern empire
Has fallen

Returning

Home

[DGFone]

Lemme guess. The USA?

[Regulus]

Actually, no.

I was kinda surprised too.

[Woeler]

[quote="DGFone"]Lemme guess. The USA? [/quote]

Northern empire? Kings? I mist have missed major part of history class

[Kitva Hyperlink]

There really good.

[DGFone]

[quote="Woeler1"]

Northern empire? Kings? I mist have missed major part of history class [/quote]

It's a poem. Isn't poetry supposed to be symbolic? USA: Northern Hemisphere. President = King. President's land = kingdom.

Believe me, it's very easy to tweak your poem to sound like it's about the US. Especially when you add your "Lives taken for granted", "The great era of power" (is over), and "The Northern empire" (is over), add to your rather famous attitude towards the US, and it's easy to see how it applies.

But if you were more literal than that, I think it's about Great Britain. An empire that was proud to have so much land that "the sun never sets on the British Empire", and completely whittled down to the mainland, and finally officially declared over in 1999.

[Woeler]

[quote="DGFone"][quote="Woeler1"]

Northern empire? Kings? I mist have missed major part of history class [/quote]

It's a poem. Isn't poetry supposed to be symbolic? USA: Northern Hemisphere. President = King. President's land = kingdom.

Believe me, it's very easy to tweak your poem to sound like it's about the US. Especially when you add your "Lives taken for granted", "The great era of power" (is over), and "The Northern empire" (is over), add to your rather famous attitude towards the US, and it's easy to see how it applies.

But if you were more literal than that, I think it's about Great Britain. An empire that was proud to have so much land that "the sun never sets on the British Empire", and completely whittled down to the mainland, and finally officially declared over in 1999.[/quote]

Alright I'll give you some hints

The sky is cold referring to the climate
The king is dead
March homewards men Referring to a certain march back home
it's over

Returning

The kingdom bleeds
A red arrow represents a country
Pierced
Its blue heart Represents the fallen Empire

Returning

For country, for glory
Picked up the weapon
A life for the good
Of a kingdom Whole stanza represents a fearless leader

Returning

Lives taken for granted Referring to a great battle, this battle was basically a suicide mission for the empire.
Who let it happen
The great era of power
Is over

The Northern empire
Has fallen

Returning

Home

You might not know of this particular history at all if you haven't had European history in highschool.