MoonLight (A little poetry)

[Eli_Ayase]

Well, I should admit, that I stink at poetry. But as I say; Who dosen't try, dosen't win.
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MoonLight
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The Moonlight shines in every place.
It shines in your eyes,
It shines in your room,
It shines in your life.
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When the moonlight will end?
It never stops shining,
It keeps shining in your eyes,
It keeps shining in your room,
It keeps shining in your life.
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If you look in the moonlight.
It will not show your road back,
It will not help you live,
It will never help you in hard times.
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Once the moonlight will stop.
You'll feel free,
You'll remember everything,
You'll never gonna stop beliving,
That you can do anything.
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I know it sounds stupid

[TheRoguePrince]

Free verse, interesting, not exactly sure about it myself, but it seemse well written.

[Eli_Ayase]

I dunno what I exactly wrote . But, I think i should edit it once i'll make sure what to write better.

[TheRoguePrince]

hm, I don't particularly like the thought of the night not being a good time, particularly since the moon is quite beautiful

[Eli_Ayase]

Well, it is. But it makes pepole go sleepwalking. My dad does that when its full moon o.O

[TheRoguePrince]

I like it, perhaps some people have such issues, and that is fine, but I prefer that time, good poetry though

[Eli_Ayase]

Thanks. Still, I'm thinking another one. But, that will take time.

[TheRoguePrince]

it always does, just have to keep it up

[Eli_Ayase]

I'm sure I will. Although my russian language keeps getting me off the english writting.

[TheRoguePrince]

my idiot teachers keep getting me off the english language