KTM Writes Songs? O.O

[KovusTrueMate]

Hey! Yes, you heard correctly! I have written an actual song! I'd like your opinions. Critique is also appreciated. Lemme know if I can make it better in any way. Considering sending it to Bryan Adams. In case you're wondering, I do know one way to get it through to him.

"When I Don't Have You to Hold"
By: Well, just call me KTM or Balto.

Verse 1:

Another day-
Another gray sky.
A stronger heartache-
As another minute goes by.
The world just feels so cold-
When I don't have you to hold.

Verse 2:

You put out the flame-
That set out hearts on fire.
Yeah-You're still my number one desire.
Life's just an empty road-
When I don't have you to hold.

Chorus:

When I don't have you to hold-
The world feels so cold.
When I don't have you to hold-
It feels like 55 below.
When I don't have you to hold.

When I don't have you to hold-
Life's an empty road.
When I don't have you to hold-
It's like I'm carryin' a heavy load. (Don't know what I was thinkin' there.)
When I don't have you to hold.
When I don't have you to hold.

Verse 3:
Another second-
Another huge regret.
Another minute-
It's about as strong as this feelin' gets.
"Forget about it!" I've been told-
But I just can't when I don't you to hold!

(Chorus)

(Guitar Solo)

Bridge:

I need you here today!
I need you here in every way!
Thermometer says it's 55 below.
I'm still carryin' that heavy load.
When I don't have you to hold!

(Chorus-Fade out)

[Ushujaa]

hey KTM i like your song alot one thing you might consider, and this is just the way i write songs, when i go to play the piano...
Intro (instrumental)
Verse1
Chorus
Verse 2
Chorus
Bridge (or instrumental)
Verse three
Chorus
Fade out

but i really do like your lyrics and its good to see another song writer around!

[SinChei]

Agree with ushuja very nice KTM
But i play in a band too and we do it exaactly like her ^^

[Ushujaa]

What dudes can't play piano sinchei?!? lol jk but seriously i'm a guy...

[WildSimba]

Nice song.

And yeah, the typical musical structure is Verse Chorus Verse.

[KovusTrueMate]

Well, Bryan Adams uses the same arrangement I used in quite a few of his songs. E.g. "Hey Honey - I'm Packin' You In".

[Ushujaa]

like i said i like it, and it really depends on the writers feel to how their music should go i was just making a suggestion

[FlipMode]

I thought it was pretty good! In my personal opinion, that arangement is just fine, if you've planned it to be like that... Simply comes down to prefference.

As I said though, pretty good, and I believe you mentioned something about sending it to him? I say go for it, worst that happens is it gets ignored, best outcome: Brian Adams pays you a load of money to sing a song you wrote lol not a bad deal.

[KovusTrueMate]

It's spelled "Bryan". But don't worry, I'm not gonna hurt you... this time. LOL! Just kidding I won't hurt you. And I'm writing another song right now. So I'm gonna be adding to the list in a day or two.