Flip's attempt at a Poem (Short)

[FlipMode]

I don't know how I keep going
sometimes, I don't think I can
living life and ever knowing
that I have yet to hold your hand

Every night, I dream dreams of you
In the morning, I find they're not real
I find false what I thought was true
and sadness is the only thing I feel

I'd give up breath, give up life
if it could make you smile
if it would end your pain, your strife
then I'd know it was all worth while

I love you more than words can say
you're my angel; you show me the light
and as long as you're with me each day
I'll be your hero, your shining knight

Yeah lol as I said short . Comments n' Criticisim is much obliged..

[Ushujaa]

i like it a lot it just feels a little unfinished, but that's just a matter of opinion...
i really like the last stanza

[RayCat]

Beautiful!

[FlipMode]

[quote="Ushujaa"]i like it a lot it just feels a little unfinished, but that's just a matter of opinion...
i really like the last stanza[/quote]

To be quite honest, I did cut a chunk out because I thought it sucked lol. And thanks for teh feedback