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Chameleon (Zira & Scar)

Re: Chameleon (Zira & Scar)

Postby Gemini » July 7th, 2014, 9:48 am

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Re: Chameleon (Zira & Scar)

Postby Harvs » July 7th, 2014, 10:23 am

Pfft. I do what I want. :nukableh: You'll take what you get, or get what you take!

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Re: Chameleon (Zira & Scar)

Postby Gemini » July 7th, 2014, 10:41 am

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Re: Chameleon (Zira & Scar)

Postby Harvs » July 7th, 2014, 10:43 am

That's good. Do that. :nukayell:




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Re: Chameleon (Zira & Scar)

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Re: Chameleon (Zira & Scar)

Postby Azdgari » July 22nd, 2014, 4:36 am

I like this story, GG. You're a talented author; Scar's a great character and you write him well. His dialogue, and in some points lack thereof, feel natural, which is saying a lot. The text flows with good timing and pace, and you've got some lovely diction.

My only beef with it is the ending, and this is totally my opinion because what you've got works great too. But it feels like a cop-out to me. I think that Zira and Scar have a wildly complex dynamic, and this story is trying to unpack whether or not Scar is even capable of returning Zira's love. I think that there's something powerful about the fact that this isn't something that happened overnight; this was probably something that Zira wrestled with for a long time and I think that it would say something poignant that she worked up the courage to ask that question and somehow it just faded away with time, as honestly tends to happen in the real world.


But that's all a tangent. Good work. Keep doing what you're doing! :glee:
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