Where's Kopa?

[Yumacub]

Kiara and Kovu were done roaring,along with Kiara's parents,Simba and Nala.They were about to celebrate Kovu's welcoming to the pride.Kiara had something on her mind though...."Daddy,Where's my brother Kopa?" Simba was hesitant.
"Kiara,a long time ago,when you were still a young cub,I told you he went to start his own pride remember?" Kiara looked down at the ground."But-SIGH He really..." Kiara looked up at her father hopefully."He...died." Kiara's hopeful expression turned to shock."Daddy...how?" Simba looked at Kovu and then back at Kiara. "Kiara,Kopa went out to play with Nuka...Zira's son." Kovu cringed at the sound of his brother's name. "Zira found out that her son was playing with the murderous king's heir to the throne and became very angry.She planned to kill Kopa to get revenge for her mate."

[KiarasMate]

Sounds like an interesting start to a great Fan Fic. ^^ Hope you will write more soon and I look forward to reading it.

[LilTiger]

KM's right. It seems it will be a good fanfiction. Can't wait to read it!

[Yumacub]

Kiara and Kovu were done roaring,along with Kiara's parents,Simba and Nala.They were about to celebrate Kovu's welcoming to the pride.Kiara had something on her mind though...."Daddy,Where's my brother Kopa?" Simba was hesitant.
"Kiara,a long time ago,when you were still a young cub,I told you he went to start his own pride remember?" Kiara looked down at the ground."But-SIGH He really..." Kiara looked up at her father hopefully."He...died." Kiara's hopeful expression turned to shock."Daddy...how?" Simba looked at Kovu and then back at Kiara. "Kiara,Kopa went out to play with Nuka...Zira's son." Kovu cringed at the sound of his brother's name. "Zira found out that her son was playing with the murderous king's heir to the throne and became very angry.She planned to kill Kopa to get revenge for her mate."
Kiara lowered her head. "Tell me about him?" Kiara really wanted to know her brother...
"Alright...Kopa looked exactly like me when I was a cub.The only difference,was that he had a redish brown tuft on his head.He didn't have many friends,just Timon, Pumbaa and Nuka.Timon loved how he was just like me...Adventurous,playful...basically,me all over again!He was so excited when his new little sister came into the world...you."

[KiarasMate]

Nice new part to your Fan Fic my friend. ^^ Only suggestions I can give is that you don't really need to re-write the last part of your previous post, since this is a story, rather than like a weekly TV show. Your reader should be able to remember what happened last, and if not, they can just go and re-read the previous part of your story. Also, you might want to add a bit more to each post if you can. I mean, it's great to read new posts, but the more material you add in, the more enthralled your reader will become. Too many small posts might lead them to get bored with the story, just because it's not moving along fast enough or it's just too much work to read a million little posts. Just my suggestions though and I really am enjoying the story thus far. ^^ Keep up the excellent work my friend. Looking forward to the next part.

[KopsTheTerminator]

I like the story so far! I can't wait to read more!

[Yumacub]

Kiara smiled at that. "Anyways, Kopa was playing with Timon one day in the Pridelands. 'Say Timon what's the tastiest grub you ever had?' Kopa was asking him. Timon replied,'The crunchy beetle is my favorite!' Kopa laughed and tossed a red slimy worm into his mouth. 'Yummy! Ha ha!'
Timon sighed and started walking back to Priderock. 'Huh? Timon?' 'Sorry kid but I'm beat! I need to go back and rest...' Timon had already reached Priderock and Kopa followed right behind. Kopa was tired of walking so he figured that he'd lay there till it was night. At that moment it was evening. But Zira was watching him the whole time and then stepped out of the tall grass. Kopa turned around and gasped. 'Oh Zira it's just you...You gave me a real fright!' Kopa said to the widow lioness. 'Oh why little prince what are you doing all by yourself?' Zira asked innocently.
'I was just resting for while but I'll be on my way now.' He started to get up but Zira stepped on his tail. 'Now now little prince,I can't let you get away so soon. If I am to get my perfect revenge on your father,you will either do as I tell you or die trying!' Kopa nodded shyly. What in the heck was Zira talking about? 'Very good choice Kopa...' Zira grinned evily. 'Now to understand what a crazy lioness like me is talking about, you must listen to the whole thing.' 'First of all, Scar was the rightful ruler of the Pridelands! Second, your father thought he was the true king-and before you say ANYTHING-he wasn't and he killed-no...Murdered my beloved mate Scar!' " Simba was saying. Kiara looked a little angry. How could someone as much as a brute as Zira was, do this to an innocent cub who had nothing to do with Scar's death?

[Shiver114]

Wow! That is sooo awesome! You should seriously consider being an Author....

[Yumacub]

[quote="Shiver114"]Wow! That is sooo awesome! You should seriously consider being an Author.... [/quote]
Aaaw thanks! ^^ That's so nice! I'm trying to write better lol. Do you want to make a fanfic? Cause you are welcome to!

[KiarasMate]

Another nice part to your story my friend. ^^ Looking forward to reading what happens next.