A Prince's Wish

Re: A Prince's Wish

Postby divsalley » April 12th, 2010, 10:56 pm

Chapter Seven: Makani's Woe



Mohatu felt guilty about not being able to tell Zahara about how he felt. He didn't know how he'd be able to tell her that he no longer wished to marry her when the time came. He didn't feel like telling his parents because they'd already given him the best advice they could. He wished he could tell his brother, but he doubted that Makani would understand. But he decided to talk to him anyway. So one day, he went to find his brother. It was a beautiful morning and Makani was bathing himself in the sun when Mohatu approached him.

"Hey, Makani," Mohatu said slowly. Makani looked at him and smiled. "I need to talk to you, Makani," he finished.

Makani sat up and asked, "What about?"

Mohatu sighed as he said, "It's about Zahara." Makani raished his eyebrows and rolled his eyes. Then he looked away for a minute. He didn't want to get involved in this, but Mohatu was his brother. He sighed and looked at Mohatu.

"What's going on, Mo?" he asked him.

Mohatu sighed as he said, "You see, Makani... Mom and dad told me that she's the one they've chosen for me as a mate... I like Zahara, but not as much as I like Tahiti! It's just so... confusing! I don't want to hurt Zahara, and I don't want to jeopardize my friendship with her. But if I marry her, I'd be doing something I dont want to do! I really don't know how to talk to her about this." Makani looked at his brother and saw how troubled he was. He knewMohatu would never want to hurt anyone deliberately, so he decided to help.

"Look, Mo... I know you don't want to hurt Zahara intentionally, but you will if you don't tell her. She still thinks that you want to marry her, Mo... and until you tell her otherwise, she's going to hold on to that and hold you to it, too. And she's going to be really upset if you wait until the very end to let her know about this," Makani finished.

Mohatu sighed and asked, "How do I tell her that I like her, but I don't want to marry her?"

"There's no easy way to tell anyone that, Mo... But you'd better do it sooner than later," Makani said.

Mohatu nodded as he said, "Thanks, Makani... I'll do that. But for now, would you like to come with me and Busara for a swim?"

Makani smiled and said, "I'm in." They walked together to fins Busara. But on the way, Makani plucked up the courage to ask Mohatu something he'd wanted to for a long time.

"Why do you not like Zahara, Mo? She's sweet and caring and kind. What more could you ask for?" Makani asked his brother.

"I'd been asking myself the same thing until recently. And I'll tell you this. When I'm with Tahiti, I feel so... so happy! I don't know what happens to me when I'm with her... All I know is that she's the lioness I want as my Queen. And I çan't explain what I feel for her... It's like she's become such a big part of me, and I love it!" Mohatu said.

Makani nodded and said, "I see... and Zahara doesn't make you feel that way?"

Mohatu sighed and said, "No, she doesn't. She's a good friend, Makani, and I do care for her. But I don't think I'd be able to live with her as my Queen and have cubs with her... And these are the things I'm expected to do if I do marry her."

Makani didn't say anything at the moment. He'd always liked Zahara, but she'd only paid attention to Mohatu. And the worst of it was that Mohatu didn't even like her! Why had their parents decided to have her married to Mohatu and not him? He was the one who liked her, after all... He sighed at the irony until they met their sister. Then he tried his best not to show them how he felt at the moment. But he knew that he wouldn't be able to do anything about it until Mohatu finally plucked up the courage to tell Zahara about his true feelings.
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Re: A Prince's Wish

Postby divsalley » April 13th, 2010, 1:45 am

Chapter Eight: Zahara's Dilemma



A young lioness was sitting on a hill as she watched the sunset. Her blue eyes keenly scanned the horizon as a thought came to her mind.

"I wish Mohatu was here..." Then she remembered why Mohatu wasn't there. He was out with her. Zahara didn't know how to tell him that she wasn't comfortable with the fact that he spent so much time with Tahiti. Her only consolation was that in the end, he would be with her forever. She smiled at the thought. That's when she saw Mohatu walk towards her. They were both young adults now. Mohatu's mane had grown rich and thick. She had grown into a beautiful lioness.

"I thought you'd never come!" Zahara said happily and went up to him to nuzzle him. At first, Mohatu responded, but then he remembered Tahiti and pulled away. He had to tell Zahara the truth. He'd been unable to do so until now. As he looked away, Makani's words echoed in his brain...

"There's no easy way to tell anyone that, Mo... But you'd better do it sooner than later," Makani had said.

"Is everything alright, Mohatu?" she asked him.

Mohatu sighed and said, "No, Zahara... Everything is not alright. I need to ask you something."

"What is it?" Zahara asked him.

Mohatu looked at her and asked, "How are you so sure you want to marry me, Zahara?"

Zahara laughed and said, "I'm sure because I like you, Mohatu. And we've known each other ever since we were little! So we know each other pretty well! What more could I ask for?"

Mohatu sighed and asked, "Aren't we supposed to have something more than just friendship connecting us? Don't get me wrong, Zahara... You're a wonderful friend! But that's all you'll ever be to me! A friend! And I always thought that my Queen would be someone I'd care for deeply... But when I see you, I see a friend! I don't see the lioness I want to marry!"

Zahara was stunned. She had no idea Mohatu felt this way. All this time, she'd consoled herself saying he'd be hers in the end... Now, as she heard what he said, everything seemed to come crashing down. She was close to tears as she asked, "Why are you telling me this now?"

Mohatu looked at her and said, "I don't want to hurt you, Zahara... I want you to find a mate who will love you and care for you in a way I never will. You deserve someone who loves you. I just care for you. If we get married, it would be completely unfair to you, because I will never be able to love you that way... I'm sorry."

Zahara was trying her best to control her anger. Then she looked at him and asked, "This is because of her, isn't it?"

Mohatu knew what she meant. He looked at her and said, "Don't blame Tahiti, Zahara. The fault is mine! I'm the one who couldn't see you the way you wantede to... I know you wanted us to get married, but... I just can't do that! I just can't! I'm sorry! I cannot betray what I feel for Tahiti just because of a decision my parents made for me!"

Zahara was infuriated. "Go! Just go to her! I don't want to see you ever again!" she yelled.

"Zahara, I..;" Mohatu began, but he was silenced by the look on her face. He walked away from there without anoher word.

Zahara's anger knew no bounds as she thought of what had just transpired. Everything she'd ever believed and wanted had just been taken away from her. And it was all Tahiti's fault! If she hadn't come between her and Mohatu, this would never have happened! She let out a roar of frustration as she thought about the whole thing. Then, as she walked back home, she saw a dear friend.

"Walk with me," Makani said calmly. Zahara reluctantly follwed him.

"Mohatu told me what happened," Makani said slowly. Zahara remained silent. She didn't want to say anything. She was too hurt by what had just happened.

"I know you're upset, Zahara... and I know how much you had your heart set upon becoming his Queen. But he's been fighting this for a long time!" Makani said.

"You mean you knew about this?" Zahara asked angrily. Makani nodded slowly. A fresh wave of anger swept over her now.

"Why didn't you tell me sooner?" she asked him angrily.

"It wasn't my place to tell you. Be it as a friend or as Mohatu's brother. I wanted you to hear it from him. For as close as we are, Zahara, you wouldn't have believed me if I told you how Mohatu really felt," Makani said calmly. Zahara looked at him and knew that he was right. Then she found herself weeping. She didn't know what to do.

"Believe me when I tell you this, Zahara... He cares for you deeply. But he doesn't see you the way he sees Tahiti," Makani said.

Zahara looked at him and said, "I don't know if anyone will ever love me that way."

Makani sighed as he watched her weep. He wanted so badly to tell her how much he cared for her... That it didn't matter what Mohatu thought of her, because he would always be there for her. Everything he'd ever felt for her came rushing to him as he bent down to nuzzle her and comfort her. Zahara was alarmed at first, but then she looked into Makani's eyes and saw what she'd been looking for in Mohatu all along. And yet, she couldn't bring herself to forget the fact that she'd been promised the opportunity of being Mohatu's Queen... How could she let him get away with that? And why did it suddenly not matter as she nuzzled Makani again?
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Re: A Prince's Wish

Postby Ushujaa » April 13th, 2010, 2:21 am

i love where this is going :D great job!
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Re: A Prince's Wish

Postby divsalley » April 13th, 2010, 2:40 am

:D The idea was to create a whole new perspective for Zahara... I mean, I've completely bashed her before for being too subtle and submissive, but now we'll get to know more about what she thinks!!!
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Re: A Prince's Wish

Postby YFWE » April 13th, 2010, 3:12 am

Very, very good. Character conflict is always the best. Part of me hopes that finding out that Makani has some feelings for her might curb Zahara's anger, but another part of me wants to see a bit more conflict arise. Guess we'll see what happens. I commend you for another job well done, though. My only recommendation would be to perhaps slow down the storyline a bit so that everything's not as rushed, and perhaps try to cut down on the use of shorter sentences in SOME cases. Otherwise, it's quite good.
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Re: A Prince's Wish

Postby divsalley » April 13th, 2010, 3:32 am

[quote="YFWE"]Very, very good. Character conflict is always the best. Part of me hopes that finding out that Makani has some feelings for her might curb Zahara's anger, but another part of me wants to see a bit more conflict arise. Guess we'll see what happens.[/quote]

You're right about that!!! :wink:
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Re: A Prince's Wish

Postby TheWhistlerify » April 13th, 2010, 11:05 am

This is getting very good! I just love it
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Re: A Prince's Wish

Postby divsalley » April 14th, 2010, 4:58 am

Chapter Nine: Ultimatums and Decisions



Zahara was still overwhelmed by what had happened just a while ago with Makani. All this time, she'd only paid attention to Mohatu while Makani was blindsided completely. How could she be so cruel to him and not see it? She'd tried so hard to win Mohatu's affections, and in the process she'd completely ignored someone who didn't need to be won over at all! She walked back home with her head spinning from the war that raged inside her. Should she forget about Mohatu completely? Should she be content with being Makani's mate, now that she'd found such happiness with him? She needed to talk to her mother about this. She would know what to do. So she walked slowly to Pride Rock thinking about the whole situation. As she reached the mouth of the cave, she found Mohatu waiting for her.

"Zahara, please listen to me," Mohatu said. "I don't want to hurt you! If I marry you, I won't be happy! And if I'm not happy, I won't be able to keep you happy. I want you to be with someone who loves you and cares for you. Forgive me for causing you this much pain. That wasn't what I wanted at all."

Zahara looked at him and said, "I understand, Mohatu... But I wanted that lion to be you. I still do! Ever since I was a cub, I was told that you would be the one I'd have to spend my life with! I was supposed to be your Queen! And I loved you because my whole life, I was told that you were going to be my mate! Now you suddenly decide to take that away from me? How can you even think of doing that? Would you have forgiven me so easily if I had done this to you?"

Mohatu looked at her sadly and said, "I don't know the answer to that. Telling you that I would have been able to forgive you would only be too easy for me. And it certainly won't make you feel better."

Zahara was completely taken aback by what she'd just said, and also by what Mohatu told her. He really was being completely honest with her, but it was too late. She realized how her head had been filled with dreams while he kept sulking about it... Shouldn't he have told his parents earlier about the whole thing? If he was this unhappy about it, shouldn’t he have let her know about it? She was his close friend! Couldn't he have confided in her? Couldn't he have said, just once that he didn't want to marry her? She was still so terribly confused about what she'd found out today. She was still trying to process it. Then she remembered how hurt she was when Mohatu had finally confessed about how he felt. An anger such as she'd never known consumed her. She couldn't let him get away with this!

"I don't care what happens to your precious girlfriend, Mohatu. But I will tell you this. You will be punished for hurting me the way you did, and severely. You will marry me and make me your Queen! Or I will rally the lionesses and lead them against you! They will not spare you for what you've done to me! Choose now! Tahiti? Or your Kingdom? You have a day to decide! I want your answer by sunset tomorrow. If I don't get one, I'll deal with you as i see fit!" Zahara said angrily.

Mohatu looked horrified to say the least. This lioness wasn't the friend he knew and cared for. She was consumed by her anger at the moment. "Zahara, you don't mean that!" he said. "Please reconsider! You wouldn't want to fight your friends!"

"I mean every word, Mohatu. You will pay for what you've done! You have no idea how much you've hurt me! I will never be able to forgive you for this!" Zahara said. "It would be stupid of me to blame Tahiti... She didn't do this deliberately! But you... you knew all along how unhappy you were about this! You could've told anyone! You could've told me! But you didn't! That's what hurts me most! Now get away from me! I need to talk to my mother." Mohatu stepped aside and watched her go in. Then he walked away towards the meadows as he thought of how angry and hurt Zahara was. He looked back at Pride Rock one last time before he wandered into the sunset.

Inside Pride Rock, Gaea was awakened by her daughter. She looked up and found Zahara looking at her in a very resolute manner. "What's going on, Zahara?" she asked her daughter.

Zahara sighed and said, "I want you to help me rally as many lionesses as you can. We're going to make Mohatu pay for what he's done to me!" Gaea was stunned at the resolve in her daughter's voice.

"What has he done to you, Zahara?" Gaea asked her. "Tell me now so I can do something about it and help you!" Zahara laughed in a hollow sort of way. It scared her, and more importantly, it worried her.

"Ask me what he hasn't done, mother... He just plucked up the courage to tell me that he doesn't want to marry me at all! He never did! And he tells me that he's sorry! He took everything away from me and he expects me to forgive him! Well, that's not going to happen! He will have to pay for all the pain he's caused me. I asked him to choose between me and Tahiti. If he chooses me, then everything will go according to plan. If he chooses her, we'll rally the lionesses against him and take his Kingdom away from him! He deserves it!" Zahara spat. Gaea was shocked at the anger in her daughter's voice. She didn't know what to tell her at the moment, but she didn't have to. Someone else beat her to it.

"What have you done, Zahara?" Makani asked her. He looked horrified to say the least. "You can't be serious! You've asked the impossible of my brother! How could you do this?" Zahara was completely taken aback by Makani's anger. She didn't know what to tell him. "Answer me, Zahara! Why did you do it?" Makani asked her angrily. "Why did you threaten him?" Zahara couldn't reply. "Zahara, please... I know you're angry... and you have every right to be! But this is just too much to ask of him!" Makani said, softening a little. Zahara still didn't reply and looked away. She didn't want to talk to anyone at the moment, least of all him. Makani sighed and left to find his brother.

Mohatu was sitting under a mangrove tree when he heard the slight flapping of wings. he looked around to find little Zuzu flying around him.

"Hey, Zuzu," Mohatu said tonelessly.

"What's wrong, Mohatu?" Zuzu asked him.

"I don't want you to worry about it for me, my friend... I'll be fine... I just have a big decision to make, and I just don't know how I'm going to go about it," Mohatu said.

"Oh... What do you have to decide?" Zuzu asked eagerly.

"Ah, Zuzu... It's too long a story to tell right now... But I promise you... if I ever live through this, I'll tell you all about it," Mohatu said as he laughed sadly. Zuzu nodded at him and flew back to her nest. Mohatu sighed and got up to leave. The enormity of his decision weighed heavily on him. He sighed as he thought of how much pain he'd caused Zahara... And through all this, he hadn't once thought of Tahiti... He knew he'd have to tell her soon. He went all around the Pridelands trying to find her. He found her by the river.

"Hey, Mohatu," she said as she nuzzled him lightly. Mohatu smiled at her and sat down beside her. They looked at the horizon for a minute and then looked at each other.

Mohatu sighed and said, "I've got a decision to make, Tahiti... and I want you to promise me that no matter what I decide, you won't hate me."

Tahiti was puzzled as she asked, "What happened, Mohatu? What kind of decision do you have to make?" Mohatu didn't answer her immediately. Tahiti couldn't be swayed that easily. "Tell me about it, Mohatu," she said firmly.

Mohatu sighed and said, "It's about Zahara. My parents had decided to betroth me to her when we were cubs... I didn't like it, but I was asked to wait before i decided anything... And now, I know I don't like the idea... And when I told Zahara about it, she got very upset and asked me to choose between the two of you... If I choose her, everything will go on the way my parents intended it. If I choose you, she'll rally the lionesses against me to take my Kingdom away from me."

If Tahiti was surprised, she didn't show it. "Then what's the problem? You know what you have to do!" she said as calmly as she could.

"But I love you, Tahiti... I can't do this to you and betray what I feel for you! I can't do that! I won't do that!" Mohatu said firmly.

"This Kingdom is your ancestors' gift to you! They lived and died protecting it! Don't give it up because of me! I will never forgive you if you do! We should be glad for the time we had with each other. I will cherish it for the rest of my life," Tahiti said calmly.

"How can you let go so easily?" Mohatu asked her in shock. He hadn't expected her to let this go so easily.

"Because I know you will never forgive yourself if you lose your Kingdom! You will love me, I know... But you will never forgive yourself for hurting your family," Tahiti said.

"You didn't make this any easier on me!" Mohatu said as he laughed and got up. "I have to go, Tahiti. The decision will have to be made tomorrow. And I'll let you know as soon as I decide on anything. Meet me here at sunset tomorrow," he said and he left.

As he walked back, he ran into Makani who smiled at him slightly as he said, "I need to talk to you, Mo."

"It's about Zahara, isn't it?" Mohatu asked sadly.

"I know she's put you in a difficult position, Mo, but you have to understand that she did this only because she'd been told ever since she was young that she would end up with you! That's all she ever wanted! But if you don't want the same thing, Mo, then I won't ask you to forget your happiness and choose Zahara. But if you decide to choose her, Mo, then please promise me this... Promise me that you will keep her happy, no matter how unhappy it makes you! Treat her with love and respect like you would Tahiti. Let her not regret having dreamt of being with you... Don't hurt her any more than you already have!" Makani said.

Mohatu looked at his brother and sensed how serious he was about this. He didn't know what to tell him at the moment. Then he lowered his head and sighed as he said, "I promise I will do everything in my power to keep her happy if I choose her. That's the most I can guarantee, Makani, and that's the most I can do under the circumstances. I need to be alone right now... Forgive me if I sound rude, but I have a lot on my mind and very little time to sort it out."

Makani nodded as he said, "Just remember what I told you." Then he walked back home.

Mohatu nodded at his brother, and as he watched him go, he realized Makani was more upset than he was letting on. Then he smiled at his brother's concern for Zahara. It was touching to say the least. But soon it dawned on him that it might be something more, and it didn't make him feel better because he now realized that he'd hurt his brother more than he had hurt anyone, even though unintentionally.
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Re: A Prince's Wish

Postby TheWhistlerify » April 14th, 2010, 8:51 pm

This is wierd to think that the lionesses will turn against the crown prince because Zahara tells them too =O

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Re: A Prince's Wish

Postby divsalley » April 14th, 2010, 8:53 pm

[quote="TheWhistlerify"]This is wierd to think that the lionesses will turn against the crown prince because Zahara tells them too =O

Still a good read ad always =][/quote]

I knew you'd bring that up... I'm not saying ALL of them will... But Zahara and Gaea, being part of a hunting party, will definitely have some lionesses who'd help them... That's my point here... You'll find out in the next chapter... I'm dealing with that, too.
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