The Fallen Prince: Nuka's Renewal (Part 1 of TFP)

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Re: The Fallen Prince

Postby Applejack » October 11th, 2009, 2:39 am

Nuka ish my sweetheart, xD. Anyways, My OC, Zecon, will play a major role later.
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Re: The Fallen Prince

Postby Applejack » October 11th, 2009, 3:12 am

Chapter Four

Simba nodded, walking with his two cubs, Kiara, and Kopa. He smiled to each of them, laughing. "Well, my children," he said, "Thats the extent of the pridelands." Kopa stepped forward after they stopped. "Whats that place over there, Dad?" He said, swishing his tail. "That, son, is the outlands. You are forbidden to ever go there. That means you as well Kiara." Kiara grinned sheepishly, then smiled innocently. Like she would ever go over there.

Kopa turned and started to walk back home, his tuft swishing in the wind. "Were are you going, son?" Simba asked. "Back home, Dad!" he called back. He froze as he noticed what appeared to be two other Lions walking on the horizon. Had they heard them? He shook his head. He would go out and find them tomorrow, try to talk to them. Meanwhile, Simba and Kiara turned towards the Jungle. "Time to show you where your father lived for two years." Kiara nodded purring lightly as she followed him, tail swishing.

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"Ya think they say us, Nuka?" Vitani asked, jumping in front of him. Nuka pushed past her, sighing. "Such a pain in the tail," he said, ignoring her question completely. He brightened at the fact that, for once, he had something to report to Mother. She would be so proud of him, taking away Kovu's position and giving it to him. Perhaps even more! His whiskers stood straight on end at that thought. What could she give him? Recognition? More love? Attention? There were endless possibilities!

"Hello...." Vitani said, jumping onto Nuka's head. "Earth to Nuka... You there?" Nuka smiled lightly, sweetly, and devlishly. "Oh, Vitani," he said. "If only you knew..." If only she knew. The den was now in sight, and they padded up silently. Zira was waiting for them, leaning against a rock pillar. "Mother!" Nuka called out, half purring. "I have wonderful news! We saw Simba, and, he has two cubs!"

Zira's eyes lit up. She grabbed Nuka's whiskers and pulled him close, bending them crookedly. "And," she said, expectantly. "Did you catch them?"

Nuka looked down. "Well... No," he said. "I figured we could rally a pla...oww, Oww, OWW!" he exclaimed as Zira started to pull on his whiskers.

"You were HIDDEN!" She roared. "You could have AMBUSHED and CAUGHT them! Nuka, You disgrace me!" She released his whiskers and watched him fall back with disguist. She turned and walked away, heading for the small cave near the den. Nuka rubbed his face and felt his whiskers. They were crooked. He tried to straighten them, but they wouldent go back. He sighed and roared in agony once. Nothing had gone to plan. He stormed past Vitani and went for his usual corner. Turning three times, he rested his head in the same spot he had that night half a moon ago.
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Re: The Fallen Prince

Postby LadyAislinn » October 11th, 2009, 3:50 am

Aww poor Nukey. This is such a good story so far man... I'm so excited! Keep cranking out those chapters! 8-)
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Re: The Fallen Prince

Postby Applejack » October 11th, 2009, 4:08 am

Chapter Five

Sun filtered through the pridelands as first dawn struck. Kopa was already sneaking out of the den when someone behind him yawned. He froze, slowly turning around, only to realize it was Kiara. She hopped over to him and pulled him outside. "I'm comming too," she said adamantly. Kopa sighed and nodded. "Fine," he said. "But dont you go and tell dad." She nodded and followed him as he jumped down the rocks and ran off towards the outlands.

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Nuka looked up from the rock he was perched precariously on. He would work his dexterity up so he could catch those rotten cubs. He took a breath and jumped from Rock to rock, eventually landing on the small plateau that was infront of him. He nodded, and, with an air of accomplishment, hopped down, falling right onto Kovu. Kovu rolled out from under him, gasping for air. "What was that for!" he exclaimed, glaring at Nuka. "I diddent mean it, you little termite," he said, flicking him on the nose. "Now," he said, "Go tell mother I'm heading out to the pridelands. I've got to do something." Kovu nodded and dashed off to tell Zira.

Nuka, meanwhile, turned his body and attention to the pridelands as his paws directed him there. Crossing over the familiar log, he slipped and almost lost his balance. Quickly regaining it, he padded through the path towards that same hill he had first spotted the cubs at.

Soon, Nuka reached the crest and sat there in plain sight. He could only hope that the cubs came and not some lioness.
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(Yeah, short chapter. Sue me.)
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Re: The Fallen Prince

Postby Applejack » October 11th, 2009, 4:28 am

Chapter Six

Kopa nudged Kiara with his tail, making her stop. "Is something out there, Kopa?" she said, quivering. Kopa nodded. "It looks like a lone lion, sleeping. Best not mess with it." Kiara sighed in relief. Kopa then started to move again, heading right towards the lion.

"You IDIOT!" Kiara hissed, tackling him. "Diddent you just say to leave it be?" Kopa put a paw over her mouth. "Shh..." He hissed. He let go of her and got up, creeping slowly towards the lion.

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Vitani looked around franticly. If she diddent find Nuka before mother did... She shivered at the though. Zira's words rang through her head clearly. "If you find him lazing around, or if he is doing anything that is not examplery, you report it to me, Understood?" Vitani had nodded, but would not do so, because she knew Nuka wouldent be doing anything wrong.

"Where are you Nuka?" she hissed, running low to the ground. She spotted on the crest what seemed to be a sleeping lion. She ran up to it, noticing it was Nuka. She jumped on top of him, pulling his ear with her mouth. "C'mon Nuka..." she said in a soft voice. "Wake up!"

Kopa yet again stopped as he looked closer. There was something on top of the lion. He cocked his head and moved in closer. He wanted to see what was happening.

"Oh no..." Vitani whispered as she saw grass rustling. She thought it was Zira. "Nuka!" Vitani hissed loudly in his ear. "WAKE UP!" Nuka jumped up looking around. He diddent realize that he had sent a rather upset Vitani flying through the air. She yowled loudly as she hit the ground, but otherwise remained silent as she proceeded to walk over to Nuka and swipe him across the face with her claws. "Idiot!" she said. "What if mother came? You know she dosent like you lazing around!" Nuka sighed. "Trust me," he said, rubbing his face, "I know."

Kopa flinched against the ground, Kiara following suit. He hoped that he haddent been spotted. Slowly creeping up the hill, he rested in the long grass as he spied on what was going on. Kiara hit him lightly with her tail, but he ignored it. He was engrossed in the sibling fight going on.

Nuka turned towards where the Cubs were hiding and nodded. Its them, he mouthed to Vitani. Vitani nodded and, after 5 seconds, both of them pounced on the Cubs. Kopa and Kiara flinched, paralized in fear as the lion jumped onto Kiara. Kopa, however, was bowled over by someone who was about his age. He examined her. I...I've seen her before... he thought, but quickly shook out of it as she slapped him across the face. "What are you doing spying on us?" she demanded. Kopa's eyes glazed over lightly. That voice. He definitly knew her from somewhere.

Nuka hissed at Kiara. "You're Simba's brats, arent you," he said in disguist. "Wheres your guard that should be with you at all times? Nuka sneered, putting on his best Simba face. "Ohh, look at me, I'm mister high and mighty king who can do what he wants without consequences... laadeedaa..." Vitani could not help but chuckle at that before getting back to the task at hand. "Nuka," she said. "Lets take the cubs back to Mother."

Nuka nodded, picking them up by the scruffs of their necks and, despite the disguisting sweet taste of their fur, started to walk back to the den.
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DUN DUN DUNN!!!!

And So, the Two Main Characters' Lives meet each other.
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Re: The Fallen Prince

Postby Applejack » October 11th, 2009, 4:49 am

And so, it begins. The story is now fully underway, and I will NOT be turning back!
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Re: The Fallen Prince

Postby Applejack » October 11th, 2009, 5:51 am

OHDAM! THE DREADED WRITERS BLOCK! Thats what I get for cracking out SIX chapters that fast...
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Re: The Fallen Prince

Postby CommandoTheLion » October 11th, 2009, 9:43 am

wow i love your story so far xD poor Nuka :( *hugs him*
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Re: The Fallen Prince

Postby Applejack » October 11th, 2009, 1:06 pm

All od you kind people support me when Its not even that good ._.
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Re: The Fallen Prince

Postby Applejack » October 11th, 2009, 3:05 pm

Chapter comming up in the next 30 mintutes! Maybe even 2 chaps!
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