Starry Night

[YFWE]

Thought the prologue was a little strange to follow but you did a good job with it. You definitely set up the sequel nicely... I just recommend continuing to use that spell-check so that your words and ideas are as clear as can be, and I'm sure it will be good!

[KiarasMate]

Hey Dean. Finally got around to reading the rest of your story here. I enjoyed it and although I still feel as though there could have been more detail in the later chapters to draw out the storyline a bit more, it was still a very well crafted plot and I commend you for that. Again, I think my favorite aspect about your story is how you put your own little twist upon the various events from the movie that we all know and love, and you make them your own in a way, which is nice and a refreshing twist upon the norm. I think this was a very nice story overall and I really hope you will work to improve your writing with more Fan Fics in the future as you already have a pretty solid foundation to work off of and I think your writing will only get better with time and practice. So again, with that said, excellent job my friend and thank you for this fantastic story. It was an honor to read it. ^^

[Eli_Ayase]

Thats sure a long post great work

[Arani]

It's defenatly worth reading. It kinda bothered me a little that it was so far apart from the origional TLK, but that's proably just me, since the part when they found Simba was already in the movie, and it was changed so much... Idk, just my opinion! Other than that, it's really good! Keep it up!

[Harvs]

Wow. If I didn't know the Lion King like the back of my hand, I would have thought that you made this up all your own. Great story bro. A few spelling errors here and there (sorry, I'm a grammar nazi :|) and all and all, great work. I love how you tied in scenes from the actual movie such as "SHE"S GONNA EAT ME!" and Zazu getting pounced. But I also loved how you threw in your own brand of comedy. Such as when Simba is holding Ushujaa by his tail after what Ushujaa had done to Timon. But my favorite part was the twist near the end with Scar's deal to Ushujaa. And your inclusion of Zira was also a nice touch. My final analysis: I enjoy any good read, and from the minute I read the first few lines, I knew that I should keep reading. This was well worth my time and I cannot wait for the next few chapters. ^_^

[Ushujaa]

thanks im glad you enjoyed the read!

[Harvs]

I don't think I emphasized properly in my last post just how much I like this story. I was literally thinking about it all day at school. The second I got home, I read this story again just because I couldn't get over how awesome it is. I like it so much, that I think it could have been perfectly integrated into the Lion King. Something I was wondering... your avi, is that Ushujaa? But more importantly, I am an artist myself. If you have a full scale picture of Shujaa that you could send to me, I would love to draw some of the scenes from Starry Night, and eventually post all of my fan art on dis site. Why? Well... for lack of a better reason... why not? Please consider this... I'm extremely bored at the moment. kthxbai.

[Ushujaa]

sent you a pm that i think you already got and yeah i think that sounds awesome just make sure you send some of the pictures to me when their done i'd like to see them, also give credit where credit is due but other then that sounds awesome