The Adventures of Daudi

The Adventures of Daudi

Postby SimbasMate » March 19th, 2010, 8:24 pm

The Adventures Of Daudi

Chapter One: A New Birth

All the elephants, giraffes, and monkeys, as the rest of the animal kingdom, were every excited for a new lion cub, that was arriving into the circle of life. His name, Daudi. Which meant "beloved". His mother named him this because she was very sure that he would become king, and be a very successful lion. Sabah, Daudi's mother, looked into her new born son's eyes. They were beautiful! Bright green eyes, just like his father had when he was alive. Daudi had black fur, all over him, but the rims of his ears, and his eye markings were pure white. His nose was a rose pink. Though, his physical appearance was terrifying. His was very skinny, hardly any fat on his body at all, and he looked very brittle. If you layed one paw on him, he'd be crushed. Sabah wasn't too worried about this because mostly all lion cubs are like this when they are born. Giving him a lick on his smooth shiny black fur, he gave her a affectionate lick back onher nose. Sabah smiled. Why, my son, how beautiful you are! How handsome, and how brght your eyes glow, even in the shade!" Sabah thought to herself. He was one beautiful cub! Sabah was only concerned on how strong he was. Would he be able to hunt, would he be able to run and walk? His brittle appearance made Sabah worry about this situation. "No sense on worrying about this now, he hasn't even began to walk yet!" she said to herself. Sabah then noticed that Daudi was searching for her milk. Smelling around violently, he finally reached her teat, and began to nurse. Oh how he loved the milk his mother gave him! So warm and thick down his throat, it made him both sleepy and happy. Sabah laid her head on her paws gently, and fell asleep to Daudi's soft sucking.

The next day, Daudi woke up his mother by head butting the side of her stomach.
"Okay okay, love, I am up!" Sabah said, with a yawn. She wondered why her cub wanted her to get up. Was there danger near? Or was he still sleeping, and still in a dream? Either way, Sabah woke up to find her son, leaping around, flicking his tail wildly. He had a gleeful smile, spread across his cute face. Purring, seeing his mother was up he ran around her hind legs, nipping playfully at her foot, as if he was saying: "Mommy, play with me! Come show me the kingdom! Please please?!" Sabah looked confused at first, then noticed what he wanted. She picked him up by the scruff, and pranced outside into the toasty atmosphere. Daudi tried to escape his mother's grip, by squirming around, until she finally let him go. She then noticed, that he could walk. But Sabah was confused, because she never taught him. Maybe it was a special gift he had. Running out into the grassy plains, Daudi made chuffing noises, and he pounced on everything he could find. "How strange.. Sabah thought, as she watched her son cautiously. "He acts as if he wasn't born yesterday!" He has all the skills mostly grown cubs have to be taught.. I wonder.." Sabah sat down, whilst Daudi played with a butterfly. Sabah then noticed that she must show him the kingdom! But it was getting near breakfast time, and Daudi would get hungry. Plus, he needed his nap. Sabah picked up Daudi and brang him back into the cave. Daudi knew why he was brought back, though he was very dissapointed that he couldn't of killed the butterfly. Sucking the milk from his mother, and watching her slowly fall asleep again, he thought about his father.Where was he, and what was he doing? Daudi never met his father.. he really wanted to. Soon, he fell asleep, thinking of his father.

More to come. :)
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[quote="Amanda"]And just like that she vanished, like a fart in the wind.
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Re: The Adventures of Daudi

Postby SnowyCheetah » March 19th, 2010, 8:33 pm

Kewl! =3
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Re: The Adventures of Daudi

Postby KopsTheTerminator » March 19th, 2010, 8:41 pm

Awesomesauce story so far SM! I wonder why Daudi has that ''gift'' of his. Keep writing more! :D
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Re: The Adventures of Daudi

Postby Simbaholikov » March 19th, 2010, 8:44 pm

Very nice!
Keep going :)

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Re: The Adventures of Daudi

Postby YFWE » March 21st, 2010, 5:02 am

Nice start, SM! A few little things that could be tweaked here and there but for the most part, this is a very respectable start to what should be a decent story. I would recommend, if you're open to recommendations, breaking up your paragraphs so that we're not reading large walls and/or blocks of text; it makes things so much easier to read. :3 Either way, keep up the good work.
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