Loyalty [As soon as the outlanders were exiled]

[Nukascar1]

Well your charrie has to be an outlander at this point, and must be actually adding something to the plot. Give me a linky to your charrie's profile?

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[Baya]

Uh well that doesn't really play into the plot of this rp...The character is great, but it sort of kills it because he is a child of scar's and you need to be a little more literate. I could not understand what you were writing =/ This is not a personal attack.

[Nukascar1]

Uh well that doesn't really play into the plot of this rp...The character is great, but it sort of kills it because he is a child of scar's and you need to be a little more literate. I could not understand what you were writing =/ This is not a personal attack.

what do you suggest

[Baya]

I would only suggest that you get a better understanding of grammar. Im not going to lie, im not the best writer on here, but i can just say that you need to make it more clear what you are writing. For a character i would suggest a more detailed description with a very unique back story.

[Nukascar1]

I would only suggest that you get a better understanding of grammar. Im not going to lie, im not the best writer on here, but i can just say that you need to make it more clear what you are writing. For a character i would suggest a more detailed description with a very unique back story.

how could Im make mine unique

[Baya]

Give him his own past. Like make him be from far away, and somehow write up how he got to where he was. Let your mind wander, because this dude is YOUR character. No one is going to do it for you ;3

[Nukascar1]

Give him his own past. Like make him be from far away, and somehow write up how he got to where he was. Let your mind wander, because this dude is YOUR character. No one is going to do it for you ;3

am not goping to chance it so hes not Scars son

[Baya]

=/ well i can't say you can join then because that would screw up the plot. Sorry.

[Nukascar1]

=/ well i can't say you can join then because that would screw up the plot. Sorry.

okay I will chance it...but can Zira look after him

[Baya]

Well sure, but you gotta ask if that's ok with LilTiger