my first story"the dark times"

my first story"the dark times"

Postby jelle » September 13th, 2010, 8:00 pm

Hello everyone this is my First fan fiction so it is possible that it’s not that good so please don’t be harsh?. :)

This Fan fiction takes place after Scar reported that Simba and Mufassa are dead and he takes over as king.
I know that alot of fan fiction's are about this time but i thought it would be a good thing to start with.
So in this story i will include TLK movie characters and my own characters.

character list.
TLK movie characters.
Nala.
Sarabi.
Scar.
Sarafina.
the hyena's.
Zazu.
Rafiki.
My own characters.

Siri this will be the main character and he is my main roll playing character.
you can see his description here viewtopic.php?f=38&t=11439.

Amani which means peace she is a lioness in the pride lands pride.
Siri sees her and falls in love with her he tries everything to become friends with her.

Tumaini this is the later cub of Siri and Amani and he is a white lion his name means hope.



indroduction.
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So scar has taken over the pride lands and let the hyena's in
The tribe is suffering great under the hyena's and things are becoming worse.
meanwhile Siri who is a rogue is still wandering alone in search of a Pride a love and of course himself.
He then one day while still in his search finds a great rock and he thought well if i could climb on it i could see really far and i could maybe see a Pride or some other rogue lions.
so as he climb the rock and came on top he saw the pride lands.
He was very happy because he thought wow they must have it really bad maybe they will need me and i could start a pride there.
So when he came there he met Amani and so Amani,Sarafina,Sarabi,and Nala came up with a plan to use the new male lion so the states in the pride lands could become better.

i hope you like it and chapter 1 is probarly gonna be up tommorow so if you like it stay tuned ;)

(forgive me if there is any bad English i'm dutch and only 13 years old so ;) )
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Re: my first story"the dark times"

Postby TheRoguePrince » September 13th, 2010, 8:38 pm

It is a good theme, a bit vague in the intro but I look forward to seeing it.
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Re: my first story"the dark times"

Postby Arani » September 14th, 2010, 6:39 am

That's great! I'll be sure to read it! :)
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Re: my first story"the dark times"

Postby jelle » September 14th, 2010, 6:50 pm

chapter one as promised.
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chapter one the dream the hope and the search.

Siri woke up he felt very confused.
He just had a very weird dream.
He dreamed that he was looking over a big giant wasteland.
In his dream he got a vision of how the land should be it was a very beautiful land with a lot of green.
But then the land became a wasteland a saw a very scared cub running away with hyena's chancing him.
Alot of red fur and a scream and the sentence long live the king after that came by.
The scene chanced and suddenly he saw himself standing besides a beatiful lioness on a great rock with the sun shining on them a monkey was holding up a beautiful white cub and all the animals where making sound to him.
Then he wake up but the "dream" did not seem a dream it just seemed like a thing that would happen in the future.
No said Siri to himself that is impossible i'm not a mystic no one in my family was it was just a dream.
He streched out walked out of the den to the water pool nearby.
he was thirsty so he drank something and then was going to go for a hunt "maybe i can catch something")
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In the pride lands.
Amani woke up she first looked if Sarafina and Sarabi where awake but they where still sleeping.
ugh thought Amani to herself now i have to wait in the den till they wake up.
This was because she was way to scared to go out on alone because of all the hyena's.
Her best friend and Sarafina's daughter Nala wasn't wake up to.
This is gonna be a long wait she tought so she got into a corner into the den and waited looking at the rest for them to wake up.
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so that's it for chapter one hope you like you can 'give me tips.
I know the second part is pretty short but that's because it will become longer in chapter 2.

so please let me know what you think cuz i will definentily read it.
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Re: my first story"the dark times"

Postby TheRoguePrince » September 15th, 2010, 4:20 pm

Good stuff.
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