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Re: Captivity

Postby whitewolf17 » January 29th, 2009, 2:07 am

[quote="Moka"]This is awesome. I like the numbers :)[/quote]

Thankz Moka. You're too kind.

Believe it or not I actually tried this fanfic on another site before this but due to a complete lack of interest I'm gonna take it off there soon. The sad thing is that only like two people even bothered to look at the fanfic. :(
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Re: Captivity

Postby Zeke » January 29th, 2009, 8:18 am

Well Im reading it and it looks awsome. Keep going please :D
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Re: Captivity

Postby Moka » January 29th, 2009, 9:20 am

And even if people don't comment they're still reading it =)
Too bad the people on the other site won't read it.

Looking forward to more chapters.
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Re: Captivity

Postby whitewolf17 » January 29th, 2009, 2:26 pm

[quote="Zeke"]Well Im reading it and it looks awsome. Keep going please :D[/quote]

[quote="Moka"]Looking forward to more chapters.[/quote]

Thankz guys.

[quote="Moka"]And even if people don't comment they're still reading it =)[/quote]

It's not even commenting. They simply aren't even reading it at all. Out of like almost forty views only about two aren't from me and my fanfic was at the top of the page for weeks and still nobody even clicked on it :( :o So I'm probably gonna post two or three more chapters on that site and then I'll have it locked.

I'm gonna post the next chapter later tonight.
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Re: Captivity

Postby serra20 » January 29th, 2009, 2:34 pm

Great fanfic!I finally decided to read it and I can say that it's awesome!Keep up the good work!
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Re: Captivity

Postby whitewolf17 » January 30th, 2009, 1:52 am

Here's chapter four:

Chapter Four: Battle Royale

When he looked around the room Star was completely caught off-guard by the sudden amount of activity from the other wolves. Just a minute ago they looked like they were on their deathbeds but now they were leaping off the ground and running for any of three holes that just opened up in the walls.

"What's going on here?" asked Star to thirty four.

"You know what" said thirty four. "You really got here at the worst possible time. You know those fights I was telling you about? Well, another one's about to start and if you want to live to even get to the fight then you'll get out into that arena now!"

Right after giving Star this warning thirty four immediately ran to one of the exits before disappearing into the darkness. Star wasn't very far behind and he would have caught up to thirty four had it not been for what Star saw next to the entrance. To the left of the entrance on the ground was a group of three bloodied wolves huddled together.

Remembering what thirty four had said to him about leaving Star hurried over to them so he could warn them. "Hey, you guys need to get out now and go to the arena. Come on, you don't want to die do you?" pleaded Star.

He was unsure of whether the wolves heard him or not seeing as how they gave no response to him of any kind. Star then heard a loud "thunk" noise and when he turned his attention back to the entrances he say why. One of them had just been sealed shut and the second one was almost closed too.

Not wanting to meet the same fate as the wolves he was about to leave behind. Star ran into the last open entrance and tried to prepare himself for what he was about to face.

As he got to the entrance Star was once again blinded by light so intense he had to cover let his eyes adjust from the darkness he was in before he could continue on. At last Star had cleared the entrance and it was not a moment too soon for about a minute after stepping into the arena the last open entrance/escape had sealed shut.

Star was horrified with what he saw upon entering. On the ground there were mangled and bloody wolves ever where and it was almost impossible to tell by looking who was and wasn't alive anymore. All around the arena Star heard both the voices of wolves fighting and what seemed to be humans talking somewhere above them. He tried to look up but the light coming from the ceiling caused him to tilt his head back down.

And it was in that one moment of vulnerability that it happened. Star had no idea of a wolf sneak up behind him until it's powerful jaws and teeth tightened around his neck and throat. One hit was all it took to bring Star down but the wolf wasn't done yet.

The already defeated Star had no idea that the wolf above him was preparing to finish him off for good. Also unbenounced to Star was that right before the wolf's killing blow would have hit Star number thirty four came out from nowhere and attacked the assailant saving Star's life.

Thirty four had also made that one near-fatal mistake of letting his guard down after saving Star; and the final remaining wolves in the fight were not going to miss that opportunity.

Two minutes later the fight was over. It hadn't lasted very long but the destruction caused by it was incredible. Out of 100 wolves five had died and ten more were near-death. While the survivors were being taken back to the room they had entered from the winner; number twelve was being escorted out of the arena and was going to leave that place for good.
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Re: Captivity

Postby whitewolf17 » February 1st, 2009, 2:32 am

I forgot to mention this sooner but in some of the upcoming chapters there are times when the story will take place in the past so I'm gonna distinguish those from the present-day events by having them be in italics.

Here's chapter five:

Chapter five: Number 28

After the fighting had ended and the winner was taken away all the wolves were to be brought back to their holding room. Despite his current physical state, Star was coherent enough to notice when the humans began to drag him back to the room. Had he not just been attacked Star would have tried to attack the humans and escape. But Star was in no position to make such a move; so Star chose to not make any waves and just go with the flow for he knew he would get his chance. He just had to wait a little longer.

Once all the wolves were back in the humans made sure the exits were sealed and all the wolves were accounted for before leaving. It took all of Star's energy and most of his time, but just when he was about to give up searching he found thirty four.

Star moved right next to him so they could talk without bothering everybody else. Star may have been feeling hurt but it was nothing compared to how thirty four was. Thirty four had countless cuts and puncture marks from teeth and claws all over his body from the fight and it was taking all of his effort just to be able to stay conscious.

"Hey" whispered Star. "Are all the fights like that?"

"Yeah, that's how it always goes." replied thirty four.

"Great" said Star sarcastically. "I gotta ask. There were these wolves that stayed behind. Did they really die?" asked Star.

"So some of them stayed, huh? Well, one of the reasons the exits close is because they go in there and kill any wolves that either can't fight anymore or have given up and want to die. But it doesn't matter to them because they just bring more in after each fight. Listen, don't be sad for them. Wherever they are now it's a lot better than here." said thirty four.

"The worst thing is that I was so weak" said Star gloomily. "I mean, the second I got in there I was attacked from behind and I couldn't even fight back."

"I know" said thirty four. "I saw it all happen and he would have killed you if I hadn't stepped in."

"Who attacked me?" said Star curiously.

"It was twenty eight. He's been here for almost as long as me and he's so desperate to get out he'll resort to fighting dirty if it means winning. Once he had almost won too but when it came down to him and the former ninety two he just wasn't strong enough. Since then he's gotten at least five other wolves on his side and he's become one of the most dangerous wolves here. If you value your life I suggest you try to avoid him, because you're just not strong enough yet."

"Well, thanks for saving me." said Star. "I can't say I blame him though. I won't say what he's doing is right, but I know how he must feel. I'd do almost anything to get out too; and I think I know a way for us all to escape" said a smiling Star.

On the other side of the room twenty eight sat against the wall with his allies to the right of him. He had been fighting for almost a year now and to him the chance of leaving was getting further out of reach with each loss. Still, he didn't care how long it took him. He was going to get back to his pack even if it killed him.
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Re: Captivity

Postby Kovu25 » February 1st, 2009, 2:38 am

cool keep it up i want to read more which is a suprise
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Re: Captivity

Postby whitewolf17 » February 1st, 2009, 4:14 am

[quote="Kovu25"]cool keep it up i want to read more which is a suprise[/quote]

Why's it a surprise?
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Re: Captivity

Postby Kovu25 » February 1st, 2009, 4:45 am

i hate to read i bearly passed my A R goal
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