The Fawn of Rising Woods
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The Fawn of Rising Woods
by Misiziri » August 1st, 2011, 9:01 pm
This is silly, I'm getting rid of it >:U
Last edited by Misiziri on July 3rd, 2012, 2:40 am, edited 4 times in total.
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Re: The Fawn of Rising Woods
by changa » August 4th, 2011, 4:29 am
My favorite sentence: "...dusted off the sleepiness." Very well-written, and the story was nice. I was, however, confused about how much time had passed between the first and second half.
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Re: The Fawn of Rising Woods
by Misiziri » August 4th, 2011, 4:30 am
The fawns are no longer newborns but playful fawns, comparable to 8-10 year-olds.
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Re: The Fawn of Rising Woods
by Maleficent » August 4th, 2011, 4:34 am
Hey, I'm really liking this so far! It was written very well! I don't think you need the thesaurus anymore. lol Am looking forward to more! 
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Pour avoir tout le monde vous regarde et dire «ce qui est de la question avec elle?" Je sais ce qu'on ressent.
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Pour avoir tout le monde vous regarde et dire «ce qui est de la question avec elle?" Je sais ce qu'on ressent.
Marcher dans une rue vide, écoutant le bruit de vos propres pas. Volets fermés, rideaux tirés, portes verrouillées contre vous.
Et vous ne savez pas si vous êtes à marcher vers quelque chose, ou si vous êtes juste de s'éloigner.
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Re: The Fawn of Rising Woods
by Misiziri » August 4th, 2011, 4:40 am
Thank you very much 
But I used the thesaurus for most of this :B
But I used the thesaurus for most of this :B-
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Re: The Fawn of Rising Woods
by Maleficent » August 4th, 2011, 4:44 am
No problem! It's very good! Well, I use the thesaurus for all my writing too. xP
Well, I use the thesaurus for all my writing too. xPC'est le sentiment solitaire dans le monde - de vous trouver debout quand tout le monde est assis.
Pour avoir tout le monde vous regarde et dire «ce qui est de la question avec elle?" Je sais ce qu'on ressent.
Marcher dans une rue vide, écoutant le bruit de vos propres pas. Volets fermés, rideaux tirés, portes verrouillées contre vous.
Et vous ne savez pas si vous êtes à marcher vers quelque chose, ou si vous êtes juste de s'éloigner.
Pour avoir tout le monde vous regarde et dire «ce qui est de la question avec elle?" Je sais ce qu'on ressent.
Marcher dans une rue vide, écoutant le bruit de vos propres pas. Volets fermés, rideaux tirés, portes verrouillées contre vous.
Et vous ne savez pas si vous êtes à marcher vers quelque chose, ou si vous êtes juste de s'éloigner.
Spoiler: show
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Re: The Fawn of Rising Woods
by TheLionQueen » August 5th, 2011, 11:44 am
Great job Lav'ie you are doing a great job. Sounds like a novel I'm reading about the will to live. It's great to see a story about deer again. Ya know other than Bambi.
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Re: The Fawn of Rising Woods
by Zoketi » August 5th, 2011, 11:14 pm
This is awesome so far! I love your writing. <3
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Re: The Fawn of Rising Woods
by Misiziri » August 5th, 2011, 11:15 pm
:3 Thank you. I checked this on Microsoft word, it extracted all the bold and italic I had. FFFUUUU-
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