My Lion King Forum

this is a story of a purple spotted cat , bouncey. bouncey was dreaming peacefully, and this is when are story begins! '' mumm ! i love lazauza !'' she said , as she rubbed her belly. bouncey grabbed her toast , but then she saw the bee hive !, this was troblue ! she climbed , the big ,red , oak tree , she therw a walnut at it. BONG ! BANG ! the bee hive fell , and busted open. '' uh ,oh !'' bouncey told herslef , as she looked down. BUZZ ! BUZZ ! with the sound of bees in her ears , she ran for dear life ! she was conered , and she leaped in the river. her dream was interupted by vocies. '' wake up,little therp ! '' ''AHHHHHHH !'' she screamed. '' wake up ! '' the pink bouncey told her. then she left with kody . bouncey frowned. '' fine if she ruins my dreams then i'll ruin hers !'' but in order to ruin the pink bouncey's dream , bouncey would need a lot of help ! so, she went to her best friend , blackie. '' oh , it's you ! bouncey what do you want ? , this better not be one of those adventures ! '' she scoffed. blackie hated adventures , since the tresure adventure was chaotic ! '' no. it's not. i need help sneaking up on my sister ! '' bouncey told blackie !

Sorry, this is an english only forum.

umm , what ?

What he said was -
[quote]Sorry, this is an english only forum.[/quote]

Sorry but I can not follow that at all, it is just a mess of characters and even when I can read more than a line, the pacing is all over the place.

is it a bad story ?

I do not know I can not read it. I am not saying that, I am just saying watch your grammar and general use of English is all ^^

i don't know what i did wrong . i spaced.

Yes, please work on your grammer. I can barely read it.

The grammar is wrong, that's why someone has problems reading it, even I barely understand there.

You...think... good grammar.... is spacing?!?! And I cannot review your story, because I couldn't read a word of it.