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Snowflakes Silent - Poem
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October 17th, 2010, 3:14 amby xLilacVixenx
Tiny snowflakes dropping down,
Making nought one sound,
A dewdrop lay across the cooling grass,
And the snowflake it would not let pass.
So the snowflake left, it's glee had gone,
But continued to sing his silent song.
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Yes, this is a short poem, but I was hoping to do something delicate and fragile in this poem; something different. This is also an observation I find quite calming - ever notice how when you go outside at night in the winter and everything is silent? This poem is my explanation for it. ^_^
Re: Snowflakes Silent - Poem
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October 18th, 2010, 4:21 pmby TheRoguePrince
A very touching poem, the characterization of the participants is ingenius and though the poem is short, it accomplishes what it intends.....
Re: Snowflakes Silent - Poem
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October 18th, 2010, 4:24 pmby Lenor
Very nice but I would change ''But continued to sing his silent song.'' with "But went on singing its silent song."
Re: Snowflakes Silent - Poem
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October 19th, 2010, 8:07 amby xLilacVixenx
[quote="TheRoguePrince"]A very touching poem, the characterization of the participants is ingenius and though the poem is short, it accomplishes what it intends.....[/quote]
Thank you, Rogue, I really appreciate it. ^_^[quote="Lenor"]Very nice but I would change ''But continued to sing his silent song.'' with "But went on singing its silent song."[/quote]
Sorry, it's just my writing style, lol. 
Re: Snowflakes Silent - Poem
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October 19th, 2010, 8:37 amby Lenor
[quote]Sorry, it's just my writing style, lol.[/quote]Sure, I apreciate that.
Re: Snowflakes Silent - Poem
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October 19th, 2010, 10:04 amby AdAstrĪ±
That's lovely! Keep it up
Re: Snowflakes Silent - Poem
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October 20th, 2010, 8:21 pmby FlipMode
That really is quite good! I was able to determine the idea you were putting across without reading the explanation at the bottom, which I think is a sign of a well written poem :]
Re: Snowflakes Silent - Poem
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October 21st, 2010, 5:07 amby xLilacVixenx
[quote="QueenOfPrideRock"]That's lovely! Keep it up
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Thanks, lol. [quote="Flipmode"]That really is quite good! I was able to determine the idea you were putting across without reading the explanation at the bottom, which I think is a sign of a well written poem :]
That really is quite good! I was able to determine the idea you were putting across without reading the explanation at the bottom, which I think is a sign of a well written poem :][/quote]
Thank you, poems are my personal favorite and I enjoy studying them. 
Re: Snowflakes Silent - Poem
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October 23rd, 2010, 11:14 pmby Jess
Aww, that's a very sweet poem ya got there, so touching it made me smile a little! Also, it has great detail
Re: Snowflakes Silent - Poem
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October 23rd, 2010, 11:18 pmby xLilacVixenx
Winter details are very easy for me to write; tend to write poems about wintertime or snow, lol. And thank you!