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Yay! First Fanfic!

Simba and Nala Head off for more adventures! What will Happen? lets find out...

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“Psst... Nala Are You Awake?” Simba whispered as he tapped his best friends shoulder. Nala Laid there with her eyes shut pretending to be asleep. “Aw come on Nala you gotta be awake” Simba said as he pulled on her ear. Nala giggled softly and rolled on her side smiling. “Ah ha! So you are awake!” He said as he pounced on her. “Alright, Alright Simba you got me” She giggled. Simba got off Nala and headed down a thick grass path towards the waterhole. He paused and looked back up the path. “Well what are you waiting for Nala?! Come on let’s go!” “Oh sorry coming!” Nala said as she trotted into the thick grass path. They reached the waterhole when Simba saw a frog. “Psst Nala look over there a frog! Wanna chase it?” He grinned. Nala giggled softly and crouched down. “He he, ok but I bet I’ll get it!” “Not if I can help it!” Simba said as he started to chase after the frog.

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Stay Tuned for more!

Good job SDC.

Thx VM ^^

Well, this seems like it will be a fun story to follow, so I'll be keeping an eye on it. ^^ Not much more I can really say about it at this point, since there's not enough to really critique, but it's still interesting to some degree so keep up the fantastic work SDC. Might want to break up your text a bit though, just so it's not one huge paragraph, especially if your next parts will be longer than your first, which I sincerely hope they are.

Good start! I do agree with KM though, be sure to break up your text, it makes everyone so much easier to read (and just looks nicer too!). C: Good luck with your story!

a very nice start to your story, cant wait to read more

thanks guys and KM i will do