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A New Threat

PostPosted: November 25th, 2009, 1:25 am
by shadowdream
Kovu padded silently into the den which was well hidden inside of Pride Rock. Moving only his head he looked around and in the moon light he could clearly see the siluets of each sleeping lioness, cub and lion. Int the very centar lie Kiara flat out on her side with Shuja their now nearly grown up cub. Kovu lied down on her other side and pressed himself against Kiara. He listend carfully and could hear her steady breathing as she slept. Slowly he closed his eyes and began to fall asleep, his dreams taking him to far off lands.

Sudenly Kovu woke up as the sun's warm rays shone through the den entrence. With a long yawn he streched first his front legs then his back legs. He turned his head to see Kiara and Shuja still sound asleep. He noticed Shuja's legs were kicking and his claws were un-sheithed, Kovu guessed he was hunting in his dreams. For a while he just lied there and watched Shuja with a musment. He was truely proud of his song and he knew as he grew to be neirly his own size that Shuja would make a fine king one day.

Once the other lionesses began to wake Kovu stood up and left the den. Stopping just at the edge of Pride Rock Kovu looked over all his land standing tall and proud. In the light breeze which blew from the west Kovu's dark mane apeared to move as if it were ripples in the water. Kiara was now standind on his left and right behind him he could hear Shuja slowly padding up to his right side. Kovu let out a mightly roar so loud Pride Rock itself seemed to shake. Now Kiara joined in and Kovu turned to his right and nodded his head at Shuja. Again they roared and this time Shuja to joined in and it felt as if the world had gone silent to hear them.

As the day wore on Kovu found himself with nothing to do. Today the kingdome was peacfull and the lionesses had plenty of food for their hunt had been sucessful. When he made sure for the third time that day that there were no threats insight Kovu disapeared behind Pride Rock to see Kiara.

She was lying down against Pride Rock with her head hidden between her two front paws. When she lifted her head to see Kovu aproching he could tell she had been crying for her beautiful red-ish coloured eyes seemed redder and tired, on her cheek he could see the sparkle of a lone tear running down to her chin.

To be continued

Re: A New Threat

PostPosted: November 25th, 2009, 2:08 am
by KiarasMate
A nice start to what might be a very interesting story shadowdream. ^^ It's a bit too early to say anything more than that, but I look forward to reading more as you post it. :) Might want to run a Spell Check and do a quick proof read of your work before posting though. :) Keep up the fantastic work my friend. ^^

Re: A New Threat

PostPosted: November 25th, 2009, 2:28 am
by shadowdream
ya :lol: i have to work on my spelling thats the one thing i'm failing at at school

Re: A New Threat

PostPosted: November 25th, 2009, 2:32 am
by shadowdream
here i've edited some of the spelling on this one

Kovu padded silently into the den which was well hidden inside of Pride Rock. Moving only his head he looked around and in the moon light he could clearly see the siluets of each sleeping lioness, cub and lion. In the very center lie Kiara flat out on her side with Shuja their now nearly grown up cub. Kovu lied down on her other side and pressed himself against Kiara. He listened carefully and could hear her steady breathing as she slept. Slowly he closed his eyes and began to fall asleep, his dreams taking him to far off lands.

Suddenly Kovu woke up as the sun's warm rays shone through the den entrence. With a long yawn he stretched first his front legs then his back legs. He turned his head to see Kiara and Shuja still sound asleep. He noticed Shuja's legs were kicking and his claws were un-sheathed, Kovu guessed he was hunting in his dreams. For a while he just lied there and watched Shuja with amusement. He was truly proud of his song and he knew as he grew to be nearly his own size that Shuja would make a fine king one day.

Once the other lionesses began to wake Kovu stood up and left the den. Stopping just at the edge of Pride Rock Kovu looked over all his land standing tall and proud. In the light breeze which blew from the west Kovu's dark mane apeared to move as if it were ripples in the water. Kiara was now standing on his left and right behind him he could hear Shuja slowly padding up to his right side. Kovu let out a mighty roar so loud Pride Rock itself seemed to shake. Now Kiara joined in and Kovu turned to his right and nodded his head at Shuja. Again they roared and this time Shuja to joined in and it felt as if the world had gone silent to hear them.

As the day wore on Kovu found himself with nothing to do. Today the Kingdome was peaceful and the lionesses had plenty of food for their hunt had been sucessful. When he made sure for the third time that day that there were no threats insight Kovu disapeared behind Pride Rock to see Kiara.

She was lying down against Pride Rock with her head hidden between her two front paws. When she lifted her head to see Kovu approaching he could tell she had been crying for her beautiful red-ish coloured eyes seemed redder and tired, on her cheek he could see the sparkle of a lone tear running down to her chin.

Re: A New Threat

PostPosted: November 26th, 2009, 10:35 am
by KiarasMate
Yes, that's a bit better my friend. :) I don't want to sound like some boring English Teacher though, so I'll let you write your story as you want to, just as long as you're trying, that's all that counts. :) Looking forward to reading the next part. :)

Re: A New Threat

PostPosted: November 26th, 2009, 5:41 pm
by CommandoTheLion
Hey Nice start to your story ^^ keep it up xD