Three lurking Figures

[ScaЯ]

"I hate him so much!" yelled Taka, who had now become Scar. "All I did was try to stand up for myself, but then that dumb old Boma had to go and give me this...this..."
Scar began to cry, when suddenly-
"Hey! If your the future king, you better leave!" said a small hyena voice.
"Ya! Do you know what we do to kings who step out of there kingdom?" came another.
"I don't care! Kill me if you want!"
"Wait....your the king's brother, Taka!" said the hyena
"It's Scar now!"
"I'm Shenzi."
"I'm Banzai, and this is Ed...he doesn't talk to much."
Cub Scar looked into the sunset. "Do you want to be friends?"
"Sure!" replied Shenzi "We don't have any friends..."
"Me either!" said Scar

The three small hyenas showed Scar the elephant graveyard,and even the outlands.

The day was coming to an end, and so the four friends said goodbye,and headed in their own directions. Little did Scar know, Ahadi had been watching his every move.

-ScaЯ

[CommandoTheLion]

Nice its a good start ^^

[KopsTheTerminator]

I liked this. Ahadi will be mad now. o.O

[CommandoTheLion]

[quote="Kopa23"]I liked this. Ahadi will be mad now. o.O[/quote]

haha yeah he'll turn all Halk xD

[KopsTheTerminator]

By the way, are you using your own theory? Because Scar got his scar as a teen and he already knew the hyenas. But it's still a good fan-fiction. I wonder how Ahadi would react... Even through it's written he loved both of his sons, doesn't mean he doesn't get angry with them. ;D

[ScaЯ]

This was BEFORE I read the "tale of two brothers", so I didn't know.

[KopsTheTerminator]

That's ok lol. I read a tale of two brothers two months ago, I thought that Ahadi gave Taka his scar. XD

[Baya]

All I got to say is that the idea is good, but it lacks alot of detail. Try to add detail, and it'll be perfect.

[CommandoTheLion]

Its not bad xD i cant write a story o.o

[Mike]

It's not bad =) I'd concentrate on keeping your guys in character in the future