Simba's Long Lost sister

[Kelly]

simba awoke to a sunny morning, he walk over and nuge nala "time to wake up" nala wiggled "no to early" simba laughted if u don't wake up i'll have to go get some water" her eyes flashed opend "i'm awake!" simba smilied, "come on lets go get a drink." they both walk out of the cave into the sun, when kiara came.
"mum, dad!" she called ''there's an unknown lioness coming into the pride lands"
"simba what do we do?" asked nala,
kiara stumble over some rocks and pointed,
"look!"
simba walk over to see the young unknown lioness walking into the pride lands.
"kiara go hang out with kovu"
"but dad!"
"go!"
kiara walked off into the grasslands.
simba took another glimps at this young lioness, "tangani?" he whisperd,
"simba do u know this lioness?" asked nala
simba didn't replie, instead he ran of to greet the young liones,
"simba!" nala ran after him.
she finally cought up, and stoped him,
"simba!" she yelled
"who is she?"
"i think she's....my sister"
"what!"
before he could replie, the young lioness came,
"are you queen sarabi?" the young lioness asked.
"no, i'm queen nala"
"tangani? is that u?" asked simba,
"no my name is arudi" she replied
"i need to speack to king simba"
"yes"
"my mother is badly injuerd, she was atacked by unknown lions"
"who is she to us?" asked nala
"she is the unknown queen of pride rock, queen tangani"
"my sister"
"simba! i've known u my whole life, and u never had a sister!"
"u don't know becuase, my mother hid her from scar, so he didn't kill her"

let me know what ya all think of my story so far

[Arani]

Moved to the Fan Fiction area.

[Kelly]

how?

[[jess]]

[quote="Kelly"]how?[/quote]

Moderators, people who help run the forum, moved it to the right section for ya.

Anyway, this is a good start Kell. Only advice I'm gonna give is to write your story in Microsoft Word first so you can run a spell check to make sure everything is correctly written.

Other than that however, this is a neat story idea. You should draw a picture of Tangani so we can see her!

[Kelly]

ok, but my compture is stuffed up so it won't let me go on the anyway, thank u and i will be adding more to the story

[Kelly]

"why would he do that!?" said nala,
"what do think? he killed my dad so...!"
"do you mean king mufussa?"
simba looked down, "yes"
"wait! how can you know him when you never met him?" ask nala
"what do you mean he's dead? he's trying to help my mum! and she's still hurt can you help or not?" ask Arudi.
"but i saw him die..." said simba,
"well he still lives! come one! i show him to you! my mum still needs help!"
arudi stared running in the direction, and looke back.
simba started to follow,
"simba! do you trust her? she might be lying" yelled nala
"it's a risk i must take"
"what about kiara!?"
"you stay here, i'll be fine"
"fine, be salf and hurry back"
simab licked her cheek, and ran off after her.

[Chakatheprince]

Wow............. Muffy's alive!!!!!!!!!! Awesome story

[Kelly]

Thanks, I am so glad u like it! :this-is-mah-happy-face:

[Kelly]

Thanks, I am so glad u like it!

[Kelly]

Farther and farther they went, every time simba looked back pride rock got smaller and smaller...
Arudi stopped, paniting really hard. "Not long now," she looked around, simba felt lost, surounded, like the time zira tricked him and kovu.
"East." She called and burst in that direction, "whoa, wait up!"

Hours went by, but no sign of tangani or muffy.
"We'll camp here tonight, please, we need our rest." Simba told Arudi.
"No, how...? Where are they!? They were here, I swear they were!"
Simba was starting to think that she was either crazy or lost herself, but could she be possibly telling the truth? Maybe Sarabi was just trying to confert him, saying he had a sibling.
But for now, he had to rest. They both had to.
"Sorry simba. I real-"
"Goodnight kid." simba just didn't want to talk to her. And so the night became siltent, only to hear the stars whisper.
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Who thinks simba's right? Or should he give Arudi another chance?